Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the map illustrate the public park in 1920 and the changes happenend in now time first off all we will discuss about public park in 2019 themain entrance of public park was from eldon sreet and the opposite of elodon street arnold avenue was located and between these two entrances fountain was situated and the left side of eldonstreet some benches for sitting and rose garden was located and opposite as well as benches and garden was located between them stage of musicians was located and the left side of eldon street house was there which was made of glasshouse near glass house some benches was placed there for sitting ad the opposite side of arnold avenue was located near the entance of arnold rose garden and pond for water plant was situated but now grane part is totally changed there is rose garden between arnold and eldond and the four side of carden benches are placed for sitting and for parking basement is made from the left side of rose garden amphitheatre is made for concerts and right side cafe ofor meal and play area made for childres

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the two time periods and mention several relevant features, including the central rose garden, the amphitheatre, café and children’s play area. However, the account only partially covers the plans and does not give a clear overview of the main changes. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: the park is described as being shown in “2019,” the underground car-park entrance is said to be “from the left side of rose garden,” and the water feature is omitted. The 1920 layout is also difficult to reconstruct from the description. To strengthen the response, begin with a concise overview of what was retained, replaced or added, then compare the main areas accurately, including the north-west rose garden and the changes in the south-east corner.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic chronological structure: you describe the earlier park first and then introduce the present layout with “but now.” This gives the reader some sense of comparison. However, nearly all the information is packed into one long, run-on sequence, so locations and changes are difficult to follow. Repeated linking such as “and,” “as well as” and “opposite” does not clearly show how features relate to one another, and references such as “the left side” are hard to interpret without a consistent viewpoint. Organise the response into paragraphs for the overview, 1920 plan and current plan. Use clear location phrases and comparison links such as “in contrast,” “whereas” and “has been replaced by” to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a park, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “benches,” “glasshouse” and “amphitheatre.” This gives you a minimally adequate set of topic words. However, the range is limited and several choices or spellings make the description less clear, such as “public park,” “basement” for the underground car park, and “garden” where “rose garden” would be more precise. There are also repeated phrases such as “was located” and “was made,” which reduce variety. Build a more accurate map-description vocabulary and check spelling of key labels. Verbs such as “occupies,” “remains” and “replaces” can help you describe positions and changes more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect several ideas in longer sentences, but these structures are often faulty and make relationships between features difficult to understand. For example, “the map illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “the changes happenend in now time” does not form a clear grammatical expression. Articles, plurals and verb forms are also inconsistent, as in “some benches was placed” and “rose garden was located.” Punctuation is largely absent, creating a run-on passage. Use shorter, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and tense. For example: “In 1920, a fountain stood in the centre. Today, a rose garden occupies this area, with seats on all four sides.”

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