Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

These diagrams illustrate the clear images and the comparison of Grange Park when first it was opened in 1920, and the same park today.

Overall, both diagrams are giving significant information about, at first in (1920) how the Grange Park looks like and the same park today. it's about the comparison between before and after of the Grange Park.

In 1920 Grange park has fountain in the middle of the park but today at the same place there is a rose garden surrounded by sitting area, Moreover, There are two main entrances first is located on the top of the Arnold Avenue and second on the bottom of the Eldon Street of the park, but today there are two main enterances of the park, and as-well-as the underground car parking on the right bottom corner near the water feature,

Before that, on the right above corner there is a pond for water plants but today there is a children's play area. In addition, before, there was a stage for musicians on the left side, but now there is a proper Amphitheatre for concerts. One thing that is actually new is cafe. it is next to the Children's play area.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important changes accurately, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden with seats, the pond becoming a children’s play area, and the musicians’ stage being replaced by an amphitheatre. You also note the new café and underground car-park entrance. However, the overview is repetitive and does not clearly summarise the park’s overall transformation; it mainly says the diagrams provide a comparison. Some details are incomplete or imprecise: the café is east of the north entrance, not next to the play area, and the response omits the glasshouse’s replacement by a water feature. The entrances are described, but their unchanged positions could be stated more clearly. Select and compare the main features more fully, while keeping each location precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction and overview to descriptions of changes, and expressions such as “but today” and “In addition” help signal comparison. However, progression is not consistently clear: the overview repeats the introduction rather than presenting the main changes, and several different features are crowded into one long paragraph. Linking words are sometimes mechanical or awkward, as in “Moreover” and “as-well-as,” while the sequence shifts between the centre, entrances, and corners without a clear organising principle. Grouping the changes by area or by what was replaced would make the comparison easier to follow. Use shorter, more controlled sentences and clearer references to the two plans.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a park, including “fountain,” “pond for water plants,” “stage for musicians,” “rose garden,” and “amphitheatre for concerts.” This gives the reader a generally clear picture of the changes. However, the range is limited and some expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “clear images,” “sitting area,” and “proper Amphitheatre.” “Enterances” is misspelled, and “cafe” should be written with an accent or as “café.” Repeated use of “today,” “before,” and “there is/was” also limits variety. Practise standard map-description terms such as “located,” “replaced by,” and “converted into,” and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “but today” and clauses introduced by “where.” The main relationships between past and present are usually understandable. However, some errors in sentence structure, tense, articles, and punctuation reduce accuracy. For example, “when first it was opened” has an awkward clause structure, while “In 1920 Grange park has fountain” mixes past time with the present tense and omits an article. The long sentence beginning “In 1920 Grange park…” joins several ideas with commas and is difficult to control. Capitalisation is also inconsistent in “it's” and “cafe.” Use the past tense consistently for 1920, the present for today, and divide long comparisons into complete sentences.

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