Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The plans illustrate a comparison of a public park opened in 1920 and today. Overall, the main features of garnge park in beganing had a small stage for musician, fountain and pound, which is now modified and repalced to amphitheatre, play area for children's and water feature.

In 1920, at northern side of arnold avenue while entering in the west had two seats, in the east of the park a pond for watering plants was made. While on both the side of the entrance there was rose garden. In the center, a fountain and next it on the west a stage for musicians was built. Moving toward the eldon street, from the entrance a glasshouse and rose garden on east and west side was present, respectively and seats were sourrounded.

At present, the grange park has built with cafe next to the entrance, the pond is now replaced with children's paly area. Whereas, in the center the fountain is removed, and instead seats are sourronding the rose garden and next to it a amphitheratre for concerts is consturcted, the glasshouse has been replaced with water feature, also a new entrance on the east side for underground car parking is built.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main transformation from a park with a fountain, musicians’ stage and pond to one with an amphitheatre, play area and water feature, and you include several relevant comparisons. The overview, however, is not fully clear: it focuses on a few replacements rather than summarising the broader pattern of change and what remained. Some details are inaccurate or unclear. For example, the northern rose garden was not “on both the side of the entrance”; one was north-west and another east of the entrance. The central rose garden surrounded by seats is also a new arrangement, not simply the fountain’s replacement. To strengthen the response, give a more precise overview and report the retained north-west rose garden and the changes in the western area.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an opening overview followed by descriptions of the 1920 plan and the present-day park. This gives the reader a basic chronological progression, and phrases such as “In 1920” and “At present” help signal the time contrast. However, several long sentences combine multiple locations and changes, making the spatial relationships difficult to follow. The repeated use of “while,” “whereas,” and “and” sometimes creates awkward links rather than clear comparisons. For instance, the sentence beginning “Moving toward the eldon street” contains several features without a clear sequence. Use shorter sentences organised by area—north, centre, west and south-east—and make references such as “next to it” explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “glasshouse,” “amphitheatre” and “water feature,” so the main features are generally identifiable. However, the range and control of vocabulary are limited, with repeated spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural expressions. Examples include “pound” for “pond,” “watering plants” for “water plants,” “sourrounded,” and “built with cafe.” “The main features … had” is also an awkward way to describe a plan. These errors sometimes make the reader pause, even when the intended meaning can be inferred. Build accuracy with standard map-description phrases such as “is located in,” “was replaced by,” and “along the southern edge,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “whereas” and clauses beginning “while.” The basic meaning is usually recoverable, but some sentence structures and grammatical forms are inaccurate. For example, “the main features … had” does not form a clear description, and “a amphitheatre” has an article error. In “a glasshouse and rose garden … was present,” the plural subject does not agree with the verb; the sentence also makes the relationship between the features unclear. Several sentences are joined into long chains, which weakens control of punctuation and clause structure. Use consistent past tense for 1920 and present tense for today, and separate each location or comparison into a complete, clearly structured sentence.

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