Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The plans illustrate a comparisons of Granges Park built in 1920 and at present. Overall, there is a significant changes done in the park for peoples anemites, like few area been constructed, whereas some places are replaced and removed.

In 1920, the park was built very simple. The park was surrounded with seats and rose garden at the west-north, east-north, east-south and west-south areas. In the east side had a pond for water plant. Moving to the center, a fountain was built and next to it a stage for musicians was present. At both opposite direction north and south entrances were located and next to the south entrance a glasshouse was held. Whereas, the streets on both the sides of the park at north and south Arnold Avenue and Eldon

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the two time periods and reports several relevant 1920 features, including the pond, central fountain, musicians’ stage and glasshouse. However, the account is incomplete: it stops while naming Eldon Street and gives no description of the park today, so the main changes and comparisons required by the task are missing. Some details are also inaccurate: the seats are not simply around the park, and the rose gardens were not in all four corners; the north-east corner contained a pond. The overview mentions changes only generally, without identifying the major transformations. The response is also 20 words below the required minimum. To improve, complete the present-day description and compare the key replacements and additions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with an opening overview followed by a paragraph describing the 1920 plan. The sequence from the park’s outer areas towards the centre is understandable, and phrases such as “Moving to the center” help signal a shift. However, the progression is incomplete because the response ends mid-sentence at “Arnold Avenue and Eldon,” and there is no paragraph describing the current plan. Some linking is awkward or repetitive, particularly “Whereas” at the start of the final sentence, which does not connect a complete contrast. Use separate paragraphs for the overview, the original layout and the present layout, and connect them with clear comparisons such as “by contrast” and “while.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant vocabulary for describing a park plan, including “fountain,” “pond,” “stage for musicians,” “entrances” and “glasshouse.” This shows a minimally adequate range for the topic. However, several word choices and forms are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “a comparisons,” “peoples anemites,” “few area been constructed” and “a glasshouse was held.” These expressions make parts of the description difficult to interpret. “Built very simple” is also an imprecise way to characterise the original plan. Aim for accurate map-description collocations, such as “facilities,” “was located,” “was replaced by” and “the park underwent changes.” Check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a few longer structures, including “Overall, there is a significant changes done in the park…” and “At both opposite direction north and south entrances were located,” but these are not controlled accurately. Errors include subject–verb agreement (“there is a significant changes”), missing or incorrect articles and plurals (“a comparisons”), and faulty sentence construction in “In the east side had a pond.” The final sentence is incomplete, ending with “Arnold Avenue and Eldon,” which also disrupts punctuation and meaning. Most sentences rely on simple past-tense statements, with limited accurate variety. Practise complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and use consistent past and present forms when comparing the two plans.

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