Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

THE MAP GRAPH ILLUSTRATES THE CHANGES IT HAD WHEN IT WAS FIRST OPENED IN 1920 AND TODAY.

OVERALL, THE PUBLIC PARK IN 1920 AND TODAY, IT HAD MANY CHANGES EXCEPT FOR THE ENTRANCE AND ONLY ONE OLD ROSE GARDEN WAS REMAINED. SEVERAL BENCHES HAS BEEN BUILT AROUND THE ROSE GARDEN TO REST. ADDITIONALLY, FORMER SPOTS WERE REPLACED WITH NEW LOCATIONS.

TO BEGIN WITH, ALTHOUGH FOUNTAIN WAS REPLACED WITH A NEW SQUARE ROSE GARDEN, THE SEVERAL ROSE GARDEN NEEDED TO GET RID OF THE MAP, ALL OF THE SEATS WERE REMOVED IN TODAYS MAP AND IT WAS REBUILT AROUND THE ROSE GARDEN WHICH CAN BE SEEN BY JUST ENTERING IN THE PART. A NEW CHILDREN'S PLAY AREA HAS BEEN ADDED TO THE MAP BY REMOVING THE POND.

FURTHERMORE, A NEW CAFE WAS OPENED IN THE MAP. THE STAGE OF MUSICIANS WAS ERASED TO BUILT A CONCERT AREA. GRASS HOUSE WAS DISTROYED TO BUILD WATER FEATURE. ALTHOUG THE BOTH SIDE OF THE ENTRANCE WERE THE SAME A NEW UNDERGROUND ENTRANCE HAS BEEN ADDED.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important changes, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden, the pond being replaced by a children’s play area, and the former stage area becoming a concert venue. However, the overview is unclear and includes an inaccurate claim: “only one old rose garden was remained,” whereas the north-west rose garden remains and the northern rose garden is replaced by a café. The statement that “all of the seats were removed” also conflicts with the plan: seats remain around the central garden and elsewhere. Some key changes, such as the underground car-park entrance and the café’s location, are only briefly or unclearly reported. A clearer overview and more accurate comparisons would make the main features easier to understand and develop the response further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with an opening, an overview and two paragraphs describing changes. Connectors such as “To begin with” and “Furthermore” help signal progression. However, the sequence within paragraphs is difficult to follow, and several sentences combine unrelated changes or use unclear references. For example, “the several rose garden needed to get rid of the map” does not clearly explain which gardens were removed, while “it was rebuilt around the rose garden” leaves the referent of “it” uncertain. The overview also repeats the idea of change without organising the main comparisons. Grouping changes by area or by what was replaced, and using clearer linking and reference, would improve the progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “pond,” “seats,” and “underground entrance,” so the reader can recognise the topic and several features. However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear. “Map graph” is not an appropriate description of a pair of plans, and “the stage of musicians” is an awkward rendering of the labelled feature. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “distroyed” and “althoug,” and imprecise phrases such as “new locations.” Aim for accurate terms such as “park plans,” “concert amphitheatre,” and “facilities,” and use verbs like “replaced” or “converted” to describe changes precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast clause beginning “Although” and a sentence describing the fountain’s replacement. However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in basic sentence construction frequently make the relationships between features difficult to follow. For example, “Overall, the public park in 1920 and today, it had many changes” has an incomplete, awkward structure, while “only one old rose garden was remained” uses an incorrect passive form. Subject–verb agreement and articles are also inconsistent, as in “several benches has been built” and “although fountain.” Practise forming clear past-versus-present comparisons, checking agreement and articles, and separating long sentences when their meaning becomes unclear.

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