Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The plans provide information about a public park when it was opened for the first time in 1920 and the same park nowadays.

Overall, the current layout of the park has undergone significant development because the previous plan was misleading and unstructured. Stage for musicians has totally been replaced with an Amphitheatre for concerts.

Looking closer into the graph, Amphitheatre for concerts is constructed in the place of stage for musicians while the fountain is removed because of the rose garden. There were substantial number of seats on the either sides of the map but they are now aligned in the middle surrounding thr rose garden.

A cafe can also be seen beside Arnold Avenue entrance and in the north-east corner children's play ground is also formed in terms of pond for plants. Near the south entrance glasshouse has consistently replaced with a large water feature, finally there is also an underground car park to ease the visitors.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main transformation from the 1920 plan to today, including the replacement of the musicians’ stage by an amphitheatre, the central fountain by a rose garden, and the pond by a children’s play area. You also mention the café, water feature and underground car park, so the response addresses the key changes. However, the overview is weakened by saying the earlier plan was “misleading and unstructured”; this is an unsupported judgement, not a feature shown by the maps. Some details are unclear or incomplete: the café is east of the northern entrance, and the central rose garden is surrounded by seats. A clearer overview of what remained and what changed would make the comparison more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable progression: an introduction and overview are followed by details about the central and western areas, then the northern and southern parts. This gives the reader a basic route through the comparison. However, the paragraphing is limited, and the overview repeats the stage-to-amphitheatre change that is described again in the next paragraph. Some links are awkward or unclear, particularly “because of the rose garden” and “in terms of pond for plants,” which make relationships between features difficult to follow. Organise the details into clearer groups, such as central/western changes and northern/southern changes, and use precise references to locations rather than relying on loosely connected clauses.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of map-related vocabulary, including “replaced,” “surrounding,” “north-east corner,” and “underground car park,” and the main changes are generally understandable. There are also attempts at more formal wording, such as “significant development” and “substantial number.” However, some choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “misleading and unstructured” does not describe a map change, “graph” is unsuitable for plans, and “aligned in the middle” does not clearly convey that seats surround the central garden. “Children’s play ground” is also less precise than the label “children’s play area.” Aim for accurate location and change vocabulary, and check collocations so that more ambitious wording remains natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and several sentences communicate the main changes successfully. However, some grammatical errors and awkward constructions remain. For example, “There were substantial number of seats” needs an article, while “on the either sides” has an incorrect determiner and plural construction. In “glasshouse has consistently replaced with a large water feature,” the verb form is incomplete; a passive construction such as “the glasshouse has been replaced” is needed. The sentence beginning “A cafe can also be seen…” also joins two ideas in a way that makes the structure difficult to follow. Review articles, passive forms and sentence boundaries, while continuing to vary sentence patterns.

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