Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The map illustrate how the GRANGE PARK changed between 1920 and today.

Overall, the park underwent considerable development over the period of 100 years, with several places changed into new buildings. In addition, new facilities were added in the part by maintaining some old ones.

In 1920, the park had fountain in the center , with a pound for water plants in the top right corner. The part also had a stage for musicians on the left of fountain and there were seats around the stage where people used to sit and liste music. Also there was a glasshouse on the right side of entrance, and there were multiple Rose gardens in the park.

Today, the fountain isreplaced by a Rose garden with seats all around it, and a children's play area on the top right corner of park. In addition, the stage of musicians in replaced by Amphitheatre for concerts and the glasshouse is replaced by a water feature pound.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main transformation from a fountain to a central rose garden and note several important changes, including the play area, amphitheatre and water feature. The overview also recognises that the park was developed while retaining some features. However, coverage is uneven: the north-west rose garden remains, and the café replaces a rose garden beside the northern entrance, but neither change is reported. The statement that the park gained “new buildings” is also too broad, as the changes include outdoor facilities rather than simply buildings. Some details are unclear or inaccurate: the water feature replaces the glasshouse, not a “water feature pound,” and the seats around the former stage are not shown. Include the key retained and relocated features more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by a description of the 1920 layout and then the present-day changes. This makes the comparison easy to follow, and transitions such as “Overall,” “In 1920” and “Today” help signal the stages. However, the account is not fully balanced because the present-day paragraph focuses on replacements and omits the café and the retained north-west rose garden. Some linking is also mechanical, with repeated “In addition” and “Also,” while “the part” is an unclear reference to the park. Grouping changes by area or by what remained versus what was replaced, and using clearer references, would create smoother progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a park, including “fountain,” “stage for musicians,” “rose gardens” and “children’s play area,” so the main features are generally recognisable. There is also an attempt to use more formal language in “underwent considerable development.” However, several word-choice and spelling problems reduce precision: “pound” is used where “pond” is intended, “liste music” is unclear, and “buildings” does not accurately describe all the new facilities. “Water feature pound” is not a natural phrase, and “places changed into new buildings” is vague. Choose exact map labels and use natural collocations such as “was replaced by” and “facilities were added” to make the description more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the overview clause “with several places changed into new buildings” and the comparison “Today, the fountain is replaced by a Rose garden.” The sequence of past and present descriptions is generally understandable. However, some errors recur in basic sentence construction and verb forms. For example, “The map illustrate” needs subject–verb agreement, while “the stage of musicians in replaced” has an incorrect verb form. Articles are missing in “had fountain” and “left of fountain,” and punctuation spacing is inconsistent. These errors sometimes make the reader pause, although the main meaning remains recoverable. Check agreement, articles and the correct passive form (“was replaced”) when revising.

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