Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The plans below a public park when it opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main
features, and make comparison where relevant.
In1920 , Grange park will has a fountaion inthe center of park, and there are 3 rose garden opposit side of stage for musicians. the pond of water plants located the opposit of glass house.The main entrance is located on eldon street side.
Today the coditon of park planed a beautiful. In the main entrance you will enter you can see rose garden and 4 seats located here. They are added a cafe for visitors, and added a play area for childrens. Lastly one more new thing are added here that is Amphitheatre for cocerts. Most impotant thing they are added underground car parking on eldon street side.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response identifies a few relevant features, including the central fountain in 1920, the rose gardens, and several additions in the present-day park. However, it only minimally summarises the plans: important changes such as the central rose garden replacing the fountain, the north-east play area replacing the pond, and the south-east water feature replacing the glasshouse are not clearly compared. Some details are inaccurate or unclear, including the claim that the three rose gardens were opposite the stage and the focus on the Eldon Street entrance without noting the entrances on both sides. There is no clear overview of the park’s main transformation. The response is also 31 words below the 150-word minimum, which limits the detail and comparisons provided.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
There is a basic chronological structure, moving from the 1920 plan to the present-day layout, and words such as “Today” and “Lastly” help signal progression. However, the response is very short and the ideas within each section are not consistently organised into clear comparisons. For example, the fountain, rose gardens and pond are mentioned in quick succession without explaining how their locations or functions changed. The present-day details are also presented as a list, with “They are added” and “Lastly one more new thing” creating awkward links rather than a clear progression. Use separate, focused paragraphs for the overview and the main changes, and connect each old feature directly to its replacement.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “pond,” “cafe,” and “Amphitheatre,” so the reader can recognise several park features. However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations make the description difficult to understand, such as “the condition of park planed a beautiful” and “one more new thing are added.” Spelling errors, including “fountaion,” “childrens,” and “cocerts,” also reduce clarity. Aim to use precise map-description language, such as “was replaced by,” “was converted into,” and “is situated in the north-east corner.” Check spelling and use standard forms such as “children’s play area” and “car park.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts to describe past and present layouts, but grammatical control is weak and sentence structures are mostly simple or incomplete. Errors occur in verb forms and agreement, as in “will has a fountaion” and “one more new thing are added,” and articles and prepositions are often missing or misplaced: “in the center of park” and “located the opposit of glass house.” The sentence “In the main entrance you will enter you can see rose garden” is difficult to follow because clauses are joined without clear structure. Use consistent past and present forms, for example, “In 1920, a fountain stood in the centre of the park,” and build comparisons with accurate passive forms such as “The pond was replaced by a play area.”
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