Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This plan illustrates, a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Overall, the park goes under different type of changes over the period, Many old buildings and areas replaced with new features like water feauture, cafe, children play etc. In contrat both entrance gates remained unchanged.

In 1920, the park included two entarance gates from north and south which remained same place in 2020, fountain was replaced with rose garden at center of park. From entrance gates to eldon street there was area on right side for glass house which was replaced with water feature additionally underground car parking was provided. The stage for musicians was converted to amphitheatre for concerts whereas the rose garden at the top theatre remain undisplaced. From towards left side of arnold avenue entrance,rose garden and pond for water plants was sawaped to a cafe and children's play area .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main change from the central fountain to a rose garden and note that the entrances remain in the same locations. You also compare several former and current uses, including the glasshouse and water feature, and the musicians’ stage and concert amphitheatre. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the central rose garden is described as replacing the fountain, but you omit that it is surrounded by seats; the café and play area are not clearly matched to the former northern rose garden and pond. The north-west rose garden also remains, rather than the garden “at the top theatre.” The response is 137 words, below the 150-word minimum, so some features and comparisons are underdeveloped.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph describing changes. This helps the reader identify the topic and the broad contrast between old and new features. However, progression within the final paragraph is difficult to follow because several locations and changes are packed into long sentences. For example, “From entrance gates to eldon street there was area on right side…” does not make the location or comparison easy to track. Linking phrases such as “whereas” and “additionally” are attempted, but relationships between features are sometimes unclear. Organise the details by area—north, centre, west and south-east—and use clear references to the 1920 and present-day plans.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “glass house,” “entrance gates” and “amphitheatre for concerts,” so the reader can recognise many of the features. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “replaced with” and “remained unchanged.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “feauture,” “contrat,” “entarance” and “sawaped,” and some phrases are not natural or precise, such as “goes under different type of changes” and “underground car parking was provided.” Use accurate, conventional terms such as “underwent changes,” “was replaced by,” and “underground car park entrance.” Check spelling carefully, especially for labels taken directly from the plan.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of sentence forms, including a comparison with “whereas” and a relative clause in “which remained same place.” The main ideas are generally recoverable, but some grammatical errors make relationships harder to understand. For example, the opening comma after “illustrates” is unnecessary, and “the park goes under different type of changes” has problems with tense, article use and number. In “fountain was replaced with rose garden at center of park,” articles are missing, while “the rose garden at the top theatre remain undisplaced” has an unclear structure and subject–verb agreement issue. Use past tense for the 1920 plan and present tense for today, and build shorter, complete sentences with clear subjects and articles.

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