Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The maps compare the plan of a public park between 1920 when it was established and today.

Overall, it can be seen that the park has observed a number of modification within the mentioned period of time.

To begin with the West side of the park, there were one rose garden on the North side and another one on the South side. In the middile of the gardens, there was a stage fro musicians. Moverover, there were seating areas on the both sides and a fountain in the center of the park. Now, there is a only one rose garden just one North side. The music stage is replaced a amphitheatre for concerts. In addition, the fountain is demolished. At present, there is rose garden in the middle of the park which is surrounded by a number of seats.

Moving to Eastern part, there were a rose gardebn on the North side and a ponds for water plants on the Northeast corner. Furthermore, there were a glasshouse and some seats on South side. Today, cafe is opened on the North part and the ponds is transformed into a children's play area. On top of that, a new water feature is built on the Southern part which was a glasshouse in 1920.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main change from a fountain to a central rose garden with surrounding seats, and accurately describe the amphitheatre, café, play area and southern water feature. The response also compares the park’s western and eastern sides, so the key transformations are generally clear. However, the overview is vague: “a number of modification” does not summarise the overall pattern of redevelopment, and several details are incomplete or imprecise. For example, the northern rose garden remains, while the southern-western garden disappears; the response says there is “only one rose garden” on the north, overlooking the rose garden in the centre. The entrances and underground car-park access are also omitted. A more specific overview and fuller coverage of these features would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by descriptions of the western and eastern parts, with past and present features compared within each section. Linking expressions such as “To begin with,” “Moving to,” and “Today” help the reader follow the changes, and the sequence is generally logical. This is a solid organisational foundation. However, some transitions feel mechanical, and the west/east division leads to a few unclear references, such as “on the both sides” and “just one North side.” The overview also does not prepare the reader for the specific comparisons that follow. Use more precise location references and connect each change directly to its former position to make progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “rose garden,” “seating areas,” “fountain,” “amphitheatre,” and “children’s play area,” which makes most features identifiable. There are also useful attempts to describe change, such as “replaced” and “transformed.” However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive: “observed a number of modification” is unnatural, “the fountain is demolished” is not the best description of a removed feature, and “cafe is opened” does not naturally describe its presence on the plan. Spelling slips such as “middile,” “fro,” and “gardebn” also reduce control. Build a more precise range of map-reporting phrases, and proofread spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex forms, including past-versus-present comparisons and clauses such as “which is surrounded by a number of seats.” The reader can generally understand the intended changes, and the use of past and present time references is often appropriate. Some grammatical errors remain, however, particularly with articles, agreement and sentence patterns. Examples include “there were one rose garden,” “a ponds,” “the ponds is transformed,” and “the music stage is replaced a amphitheatre.” The overview phrase “a number of modification” also has a number-agreement problem. Review singular and plural forms, article use, and passive constructions (for example, “was replaced by”). More consistently accurate sentences would make the comparisons clearer.

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