Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Grange park is a public park, it is firstly opened in 1920 at Arnold avenue. It is a public park where in design of 1920 we can see that there were fountain, pond for water plants, stage for musicians. But if we look at today’s design of grange park it has been completed changed and have been modernised. Word modernised I used because in today’s design of park there is cafe and amphitheatre for concerts. Back in 1920 the layout was simple like there was rose garden in top left corner just next to it seats were there.

The things which are not changed is rose garden in 1920 it was near the pond for water plants slight to the top right side, 2 entrances one is at east and one is at west. In today’s layout rose garden is at the centre of the park and around it there are seats surrounded from 4 sides of rose garden. Water feature is taken to the bottom right corner and today’s park looks more minimalistic to see.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant features, including the fountain, musicians’ stage, pond, café, amphitheatre and central rose garden, and you attempt to compare the two plans. However, the response only partially summarises the main changes, and some details are inaccurate: the entrances are north and south, not east and west, and the rose garden near the pond in 1920 is not the one that remains today; the north-west garden does. The overview is also unclear: saying the park has been “completely changed” overlooks features that remain, while “minimalistic” is not supported by a clear comparison. To strengthen the report, give a concise overview of the major transformations and describe locations consistently, including the play area and the underground car-park entrance.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has two paragraphs and generally moves from the 1920 plan to the present-day layout, so the reader can follow its broad purpose. Some linking phrases, such as “But if we look at today’s design” and “Back in 1920,” help signal comparisons. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the first paragraph shifts between general description and individual details, and the second begins with “The things which are not changed” before describing features that have changed. References such as “just next to it” and “it” are not always precise. Organise the report into an overview followed by grouped comparisons—for example, retained features, replaced facilities, and new additions—and use clear location references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fountain,” “pond for water plants,” “amphitheatre,” “rose garden” and “water feature,” which allows the reader to identify several map features. There are also attempts at descriptive language, such as “modernised” and “minimalistic.” However, the range is limited and some choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “completed changed” does not express the intended meaning, “taken to the bottom right corner” is an awkward way to describe a feature’s location, and “slight to the top right side” is unclear. Repetition of “today’s design/layout” also limits flexibility. Practise precise map language such as “located in,” “replaced by,” and “remained unchanged,” while checking word forms and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the reader can usually understand the broad comparison. However, errors are frequent, and attempts to combine clauses are often faulty. For example, “Grange park is a public park, it is firstly opened” joins two clauses with a comma and uses an incorrect verb form; “it has been completed changed and have been modernised” has problems with adverb form and subject–verb agreement. Articles and plurals are also inconsistent in “there were fountain” and “there is cafe.” The sentence beginning “The things which are not changed is rose garden” has agreement and sentence-structure problems. Use shorter, controlled sentences first, then practise accurate past and present forms and agreement when comparing the plans.

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