Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given graph illustrates the changes in map of a community park known as grange park which was opened for the first time in the year 1920 and the same park today. The entrance of the park is same as it was in the year 1920. Moreover, the significant change is the mid area which was first covered with a fountain is now changed into a rose garden with seats around it.

In 1920, the park was full of points such as pond for water plants, stage for musicians and a glasshouse, which are now missing or displaced by another view point. Cafe was missing in 1920 and available now. The stage of musicians is now changed into an amphitheatre for concerts which has more sitting space. The top left rose garden is constant as it was in 1920. In addition, a cafe is created at the location of the right rose garden. The glasshouse is updated into a water feature. Meanwhile, Pond for water plants at top right corner is

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important changes, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden with surrounding seats, the musicians’ stage being replaced by an amphitheatre, and the glasshouse becoming a water feature. You also correctly note that the north-west rose garden remains. However, the account is only partial and the overview is limited: it does not clearly summarise the park’s overall transformation or mention that the two street boundaries and central entrances remain. The comparison of the café’s location is inaccurate: it replaces the rose garden along the northern edge east of the entrance, not simply the “right rose garden.” The response also ends while describing the former pond, leaving that change unreported. Covering the main changes more completely and accurately would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has some organisation: it begins with a general introduction and then moves to changes within the park, using time markers such as “In 1920” and “now.” However, progression is difficult to follow because several features are listed in a single paragraph without a clear grouping by area or type of change. Linking phrases such as “Moreover,” “In addition,” and “Meanwhile” do not always establish a clear relationship between ideas, and the final sentence breaks off after “is,” disrupting the ending. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and detailed comparisons, and organise the details consistently—for example, north, centre, and south. Clearer referencing would also help readers understand which rose garden is being discussed.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “amphitheatre,” “glasshouse,” and “water feature,” so the reader can identify many of the park’s facilities. There is also some attempt to vary wording, such as “created” and “updated.” However, several choices are imprecise or unnatural: “the given graph” does not describe a map, “full of points” is unclear, and “another view point” does not convey the replacement facilities. “Sitting space” is less suitable than “seating,” while “constant” is not the natural way to say that a garden remains unchanged. Aim for precise location and change vocabulary, and use standard forms such as “café.” These improvements would make the descriptions clearer and more appropriate to an academic map report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including “Moreover, the significant change is the mid area which…” and “The stage of musicians is now changed into…”. However, errors recur in sentence construction and tense. For example, “The entrance of the park is same” needs an article and a more accurate comparison, while “which was first covered with a fountain” uses an unsuitable passive construction. “The stage … is now changed” should use a form such as “has been replaced,” and “Pond for water plants at top right corner is” is incomplete. There are also inconsistent capitalisation and punctuation choices. Practise accurate past-to-present comparisons and complete sentences, while retaining your attempts at complex structures.

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