Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram provides information about the progress that made in a Grange park over a period of 106 years.

Overall, the entrances from both the centers remained same, while some new tourist attractions added in the park.

There are two main entrances from Arnold avenue and Eldon street and both remained the same, while a new underground entrance is added in the park for car parking. In 1920, there was a fountain in the center of the park which is now replaced by Rose garden and seats also added for sitting on it's all four sides. The Rose garden which initially was on both the left upper and lower edges of park is faced quite changes as upper side remained almost same by just losing it's seats but lower end completely removed. Amphitheater for concerts is an additional upgradation which takes place of the stage which was one used by musicians.

Therefore, the right side from entrance faces few new advancements since the Rose garden is replaced by cafe and pond is replaced by play area for children. Glasshouse and seats are removed from new design as water feature is installed there.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation from a formal garden with a central fountain to a park with new recreational facilities, and you compare several locations accurately: the central fountain becomes a rose garden, the western stage area becomes an amphitheatre, and the pond and glasshouse sites are redeveloped. The overview also notes that the two street entrances remain. This covers the task well, with some features more fully reported than others. However, the overview is broad, and a few details are unclear or inaccurate: the north-west rose garden remained, rather than the upper-side garden merely losing seats, and the café replaced a rose garden, not the pond. A more precise overview and clearer account of the unchanged features would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing changes, with sequencing words such as “Overall,” “In 1920,” and “Therefore.” This gives the reader a general route through the comparison. However, progression is not consistently clear. The third paragraph combines entrances, the central area, rose gardens, and the amphitheatre, while the final paragraph shifts to the eastern side without a clear spatial framework. Some references are also difficult to follow, particularly “the Rose garden which initially was on both the left upper and lower edges.” Organise details by area—central, western, then eastern—or by unchanged and changed features, and use more precise references to make the links between sentences smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of map-related vocabulary, including “replaced,” “entrances,” “underground,” “amphitheatre,” and “water feature,” which helps communicate the main changes. There are also attempts at less common wording, such as “advancements” and “tourist attractions,” but these are not always natural or precise for describing park facilities. Phrases such as “progress that made,” “faces quite changes,” and “additional upgradation” are awkward, and “left upper and lower edges” is imprecise. Aim for standard map-description collocations such as “was converted into,” “underwent substantial changes,” and “in the north-west corner.” Check spelling and capitalisation of common terms, including “amphitheatre” and “rose garden.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “while,” “which,” and “since,” and the main message is generally understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, however. For example, “the progress that made” is missing a verb form, “both remained the same” needs an article or a more complete construction, and “a new underground entrance is added” uses an unsuitable tense for a comparison between 1920 and today. There are also problems with agreement and sentence construction in “The Rose garden … is faced quite changes,” and the long sentence beginning “The Rose garden which initially…” is difficult to parse. Use consistent past-versus-present forms and check articles, verb forms, and clause boundaries; shorter, controlled sentences would improve accuracy without limiting structural variety.

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