Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The maps illustrate changes in a public park whin it first inaugurated in 1920 as compared to today.

Overall, there are some drastic changes have been made to the Grange park over the years. The major changes include removal of fountain in center, stage for musicians, stage for musians, glass house, and pond for water plants. These were replaced by a much bigger rose garden with seats at the center of park, amphitheatre for concerts, and children's play area.

In both parks entrances ramained in the same place which is at the center in Eldon street and Arnold Avenue. Upon entrance a fountain is visible straight ahead in 1920. Hoever, in today's park that fountain is replaced by rose garden with seats all around it. On the center left side of the park the stage for musicians is visible which is converted into an amphitheatre for concerts. Similarly, on the right side of the park pond for water plants is also changed to chilren play area. The rose garder beside the pond is now cafe. And on the bottom left the Glasshouse is now converted into water feature with seperate entry on the right side of park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main transformation from a fountain to a central rose garden with surrounding seats, and you compare several former and current uses, including the stage becoming an amphitheatre and the pond becoming a play area. This gives a relevant account of the plans. However, some important features are omitted or unclear: the north-west rose garden remains, the south-west rose garden is replaced by the amphitheatre, and the new café occupies the site of the northern rose garden. The overview also says the central garden is “much bigger,” which is not clearly supported by the plans, and it lists the stage twice. Develop the comparison more precisely by covering the main changes and the features that stayed the same.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall shape: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph describing locations and changes. The sequence from the entrances to the centre and then around the park helps the reader follow the comparison, and linking expressions such as “However” and “Similarly” signal contrasts. At times, though, connections are mechanical or the reference is unclear. For example, “Upon entrance a fountain is visible straight ahead” does not specify which entrance, while “The rose garder beside the pond” could refer to more than one garden. The overview’s list also repeats the musicians’ stage. Grouping the details by area or by unchanged and replaced features, and using clearer location references, would make the progression more controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a park plan, including “entrances,” “fountain,” “amphitheatre,” “pond for water plants,” and “replaced.” These terms make most of the changes understandable. However, spelling errors such as “whin,” “Hoever,” “musians,” “chilren,” and “garder” are noticeable, and some choices are imprecise or awkward: “inaugurated” is not the most natural way to describe a park opening, and “seperate entry” does not clearly express the underground car-park entrance. There is also repetition of “stage for musicians” in the overview. Aim for accurate spelling and more precise map vocabulary, such as “located,” “remained,” and “was converted into.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex forms, including the comparison “as compared to today” and contrast clauses beginning “However” and “Similarly.” The main meaning is generally recoverable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “there are some drastic changes have been made” combines two clause structures incorrectly; write “some drastic changes have been made.” In “In both parks entrances remained,” the article and plural construction need attention, and “the Glasshouse is now converted” uses an awkward tense and passive form for a past-to-present comparison. Sentence punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly around introductory phrases. Practise accurate passive constructions and articles while retaining the range of sentence forms you are attempting.

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