Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

In 1920, there is an enterance from eldon street , a fountain, pond for water plants, a glasshouse, an enterance from eldon street, Whereas today,there is an enterance, rose garden, a cafe, children's play area , a water feature, an underground car park., an amphitheatre for concert,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies several features in both plans, including the fountain, pond, glasshouse, café, play area and amphitheatre, so it shows some awareness of the comparison. However, it mainly lists features rather than summarising the main changes, and it gives no clear overview of how the park has been reorganised. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: the 1920 plan has entrances on both Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street, but the response repeats “enterance from eldon street” and does not identify the north entrance. The central rose garden and surrounding seats today are also omitted. The response is 47 words, below the 150-word minimum; the 18 words copied from the prompt are excluded. Develop a concise overview and compare the locations and changes more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response has a basic time-based contrast, beginning with “In 1920” and then shifting to “Whereas today,” which gives the reader a simple way to distinguish the two plans. However, it is only one short, list-like sequence, with no paragraphing or clear progression from an overview to supporting details. The repeated “an enterance” and the long series of features joined mainly by commas make the information difficult to follow. “Whereas” is not smoothly connected to the preceding sentence, and the final comma leaves the list unfinished. Organise the response into an overview and separate descriptions of the two plans, using clear linking phrases such as “By contrast” and “In the centre”.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses several relevant labels from the plans, including “pond for water plants,” “glasshouse,” “children’s play area” and “underground car park.” These terms help identify the features, but the vocabulary is mostly a basic list and does not yet describe changes or locations precisely. “Enterance” is misspelled and repeated, while “a cafe” and “an amphitheatre for concert” show limited control of the forms needed to report the map. Use more precise map language, such as “was replaced by,” “is located in the north-east corner” and “remains unchanged.” Check spelling and use the exact feature names consistently; this would make the description clearer and more suitable for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response attempts to distinguish the two time periods with “In 1920” and “Whereas today,” but it relies almost entirely on a list rather than a range of sentence structures. The opening sentence is copied from the task prompt and does not develop the description. The list has problems with articles and sentence boundaries: “a cafe, children’s play area” needs consistent article use, and the comma-separated items do not form a complete, well-controlled sentence. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “eldon street ,” and the final item ends with a comma. Practise complete comparative sentences using past and present forms, for example, “The fountain was replaced by a rose garden.” Use full stops and commas to separate ideas accurately.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.