Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The maps compare the layout of Grange Park in 1920 and it's present-day layout. Except for a few changes, majority of the layout remains the same.

Overall, the Grange Park in 1920 had less visitor-oriented facilities, like the cafe, amphitheatre for concerts, children's play area, and rose garden, that can be seen in the layout of the park today. All these additional places included in the present-day Grange Park makes it more entertaining and attracts new visitors.

The stage formerly used by musicians for their performaces has now been upgraded to an amphitheatre where musical concerts are performed. Next to the children's play area located towards the north-east region of the park, is the cafe. Children and their families can grab something to eat from here. Opposite to the play area is a water feature, where people can go for sight-seeing and photography. An underground car park has also been added to the new layout. The entrance to the park remains the same in both maps.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the two maps and describe several important changes, including the stage becoming an amphitheatre, the new play area and café, the water feature, and the underground car-park entrance. However, the overview is not fully accurate: it says that a rose garden is an additional present-day facility, although rose gardens existed in 1920, and claims that most of the layout remains the same, overlooking substantial changes to the central and western areas. Some details are also misplaced: the café is north of the play area, not next to it, and the water feature is in the south-east, rather than directly opposite the play area. Include the central rose garden and seats, and explain which original features were removed or retained, to make the comparison more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph describing selected changes. The sequence from the western area to the north-east and then the south-east is generally easy to follow, and linking phrases such as “formerly” and “has now been” help signal change over time. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some effective progression. However, the overview’s claim that most of the layout remains the same does not prepare the reader for the substantial changes described later. “Next to” and “Opposite to” also create unclear spatial links. Organise the details by area or by changed and retained features, and use precise location references to strengthen cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of vocabulary for describing maps, including “layout,” “formerly,” “upgraded,” “north-east region,” and “underground car park.” These choices make the main changes understandable, and there is some variety beyond basic words such as “new” and “same.” At times, however, the wording is more interpretive than appropriate for a factual map summary: “more entertaining” and “attracts new visitors” speculate about the park’s effects rather than describe its features. “Sight-seeing” is also an imprecise choice for the purpose of a water feature, and “additional places” does not accurately describe the rose garden, which was already present in 1920. Prefer neutral, precise terms such as “facilities” and “replaced,” and check spelling, including “performances.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex structures, including the relative clause in “the stage formerly used by musicians” and the time contrast in “has now been upgraded.” Most sentences communicate their meaning clearly, and the present-perfect form is appropriate for describing changes up to today. Some errors remain. In “Except for a few changes, majority of the layout remains the same,” the article “the” is needed before “majority.” The sentence beginning “Next to the children’s play area …, is the cafe” has awkward inversion and punctuation; a clearer form is “The café is next to the children’s play area.” “All these additional places … makes” also has a subject–verb agreement problem. Review articles, agreement, and sentence construction to improve accuracy.

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