Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The picture made comparison between the park's current features and the features in 1920. In 1920, the picture showed an ancient park with common seating plan, and placed the seating benches at each corner of the park. There was a fountain and a stage for musicians between the park, and this area was surrounded by the three rose gardens. The two entrance points was shown in the picture which led to a fountain area.

On the other hand, modern and aesthetic architecture has been observed in the second picture of the park. There is a rose garden that is surrounded by the seats in the mid of the park. At the west of rose garden, there is a Amphitheatre specified for the concerts and gatherings. The new space is allocated for the cafe and the children's play area which is infront of eachother. There is a aesthetic water pond area at the entrance of the park. This path also led to the underground car parking from southeast corner.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several important changes, including the central rose garden, the western amphitheatre, the café and play area, and the underground car park. However, the response only partially covers the plans: it gives little account of the north-west rose garden remaining, the replacement of the pond by the play area, or the glasshouse being replaced by a water feature. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: the 1920 fountain and musicians’ stage were not surrounded by three rose gardens, and the entrances did not lead to the fountain. There is also no clear overview of the park’s main transformation. To strengthen the report, summarise the broad changes first, then compare the key locations accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable two-part structure: it describes the 1920 plan first and then contrasts it with the present-day park. The transition “On the other hand” helps signal this shift, and the ideas are generally understandable in sequence. However, the first paragraph groups features together without a clear spatial or comparative order, and the second moves between the centre, west, north and south-east without consistently guiding the reader. Some links are also unclear, particularly “This path” in the final sentence, since no path has been described. Organise the details by area or by major change, and use precise references such as “in the north-east corner” to improve progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing plans, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “Amphitheatre” and “underground car parking.” There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “modern and aesthetic architecture.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for a factual map report: “ancient park” is unsupported, “common seating plan” is unclear, and “aesthetic water pond area” is awkward. “Between the park” does not express the intended location, while “mid of the park” is imprecise. Aim for neutral, location-focused vocabulary and accurate collocations rather than evaluative descriptions. Terms such as “central area,” “seating,” “located to the west of,” and “water feature” would make the comparisons clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and most of the main ideas can be understood. However, errors in agreement, articles and sentence construction occur often enough to make some descriptions awkward. For example, “The two entrance points was shown” should use a plural verb, and “there is a Amphitheatre” needs the correct article. The phrase “which is infront of eachother” has problems with both the relative clause and the forms of “in front” and “each other.” Tense use also shifts between past and present when describing the plans. Use past tense consistently for 1920 and present tense for today, and check subject–verb agreement and articles in each sentence.

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