Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The two maps display the transformation of the Grange public park from 1920 to the present time.

Overall, despite some features remaining the same, while the fountain, stage for musicians,rose garden, pond for water plants and grassland has replaced with other new things over the period.

IN 1920, The Grande park had been two entrance for 1920, First, Arnold avenue entrance. Second, Eldon street. Which remain same since today. In the center the fountain has been replaced with rose garden and four seats, in the left of Eldon street entrance the rose garden has been removed and two seats while the stage for musicians has been replaced with amphitheatre for concerts. Rose garden has been replaced with cafe, and pond for water plants has been replaced with children play area, grasshouse has been transformed into water feature. Some street can be removed in the park,while the right side of the Eldon street the entrance unground car park has been placed

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main change in the centre—the fountain is replaced by a rose garden with seats—and report several other important conversions, including the pond becoming a play area and the glasshouse becoming a water feature. You also note that the two street entrances remain. However, the overview is unclear and does not summarise the overall pattern of change effectively. Some details are inaccurate or confusing: the south-west rose garden was removed for the amphitheatre, rather than being replaced by “two seats,” and the north-west rose garden remains. The statement that “some street can be removed” is not supported by the maps. To strengthen the response, give a clear overview and describe the main changes by area, checking each location against the plan.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an opening, an attempted overview and a description of changes, so there is some basic organisation. However, the progression is difficult to follow, particularly in the long final paragraph, where several locations and changes are joined together without clear sequencing. The overview sentence beginning “Overall, despite some features remaining the same” is incomplete and does not clearly connect its ideas. Linking words such as “First” and “Second” are used, but the description would be clearer if it moved systematically from north to south or from west to east. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the detailed comparison, and make each sentence focus on one or two related features.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “transformation,” “entrance,” “fountain,” “amphitheatre” and “water feature,” which helps communicate the main subject. There is also an attempt to describe replacement and change. However, several word choices or forms are inaccurate and sometimes make the meaning unclear, such as “grasshouse” for “glasshouse,” “unground car park” for “underground car park,” and “Grande park” instead of “Grange Park.” Phrases such as “new things” and “some street” are too vague for a map report. Aim for precise location and change vocabulary, for example “in the north-east corner” and “was converted into,” and check spelling of labels taken directly from the plan.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can generally identify the changes you intend to describe. However, control is inconsistent, especially in longer constructions. The overview clause “despite some features remaining the same, while…” is not grammatically complete, and “has replaced with” needs a passive form such as “has been replaced by.” There are also errors in number and sentence structure in “had been two entrance” and “First… Second… Which remain same since today.” Capitalisation and punctuation are uneven, with sentence fragments and run-on clauses making relationships between ideas harder to follow. Practise accurate passive forms and write shorter, complete sentences before combining related details.

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