Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pictures given here shows the plan of the grange garden in 1920 and of today.

By looking at both the pictures one can analyse that there has been done many changes so far. But first we will talk about the things that has not been changed. First, the entrance at the north wall of the garden it is at the center near arnold avenue and at the south wall it is at the center near eldon street. Second, the rose garden which is at the left of the north wall of the garden which has remain at the same old place.

Now looking at the changes done so far are as follows. First, where there was the stage for musicians in the lefft part of the garden along with seats and rose garden at the south wall has been replaced by a big amphitheatre for concerts. Second, the fountain in the middle of the garden has been replaced by a big square rose garden and seats around it. Third, the rose garden which is at the right of the north wall has been replaced by the cafe. Fourth, there is a children's play area in place of pond for water plants. Fifth, instead of glasshouse there has been made a beautiful water feature and last, there is an entrance of underground car parking made at the south end wall of the garden.

Overall to conclude, by analysing both the pictures one must say that the changes which has been made are good, luxurious and giving an asthetic look to the garden.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover the main changes and several features that remain, including the central entrances, the north-west rose garden, the replacement of the fountain, and the new play area and water feature. These details are generally accurate and relevant. However, the overview is not clearly separated from the description: the final sentence gives an opinion that the changes are “good” and “luxurious,” rather than summarising the park’s main transformation neutrally. Some details are also imprecise, such as saying the car-park entrance is at the “south end wall”; it is specifically in the south-east corner. A concise overview identifying the park’s major replacements and retained features would make the response more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response has a clear overall progression: it first identifies features that remain and then describes the changes. Paragraphing supports this structure, and signposts such as “First,” “Second,” and “Now looking at the changes” help readers follow the sequence. The list of changes is easy to understand, although the repeated ordinal transitions make the writing somewhat mechanical. The opening and closing also repeat the idea of analysing the pictures without adding much information, and “Overall to conclude” is redundant. To strengthen the flow, group related changes by area or by type, and use a concise overview before the detailed comparisons. This would make the organisation feel more flexible while preserving its clarity.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use enough vocabulary to describe the map and its changes, including “replaced,” “entrance,” “amphitheatre,” and “water feature.” These choices communicate the main information, and some task-specific terms are used appropriately. However, several expressions are imprecise or informal for an academic map summary: “things that has not been changed,” “changes done so far,” and “beautiful water feature” could be stated more neutrally and precisely. There are also spelling errors, including “lefft” and “asthetic,” and “luxurious” does not accurately describe a park layout. Aim for consistent, neutral language and accurate collocations when describing locations and replacements.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, but errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction are frequent enough to affect accuracy. For example, “The pictures … shows” should use a plural verb, while “there has been done many changes” has an incorrect construction and agreement. In “the rose garden … which has remain,” the verb form is incorrect; “which has remained” is needed. Some sentences also lack clear grammatical boundaries, as in “the entrance at the north wall … it is at the center.” These problems do not prevent the reader from understanding the map, but they limit control. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and use shorter, complete comparison sentences before adding complex clauses.

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