Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Grange Park(1920 and today)

This passage is about grange park. It was first opened in 1920. When it was opened it had limitid source. But gradualy it growth. When it was opened first it hasd limited source like it has a one fountain, pound for water plants, seats for people , three rose garden , two enterence and one stage for musicians. But as the passaes it growthed and now well organized park. Today the park has many facilities it has water feature and car park system it also has a cafe in it. It has amphitheatre for concerts. if we campare it from fist day and today it has many facilites and now it become very papular.When it was made first time it has no many opertunities as compared to today. Now it become effective for people for its feature. now we can say that it become very papular and welorganized as the time passes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response identifies the park’s opening date and mentions several relevant features, including the fountain, pond, rose gardens, stage, café, amphitheatre, water feature and car park entrance. It also recognises generally that the park has changed and gained facilities. However, the comparison remains broad: it does not explain where most features are located or clearly state what was removed, retained or replaced. For example, the central fountain was replaced by a rose garden surrounded by seats, and the north-east pond became a children’s play area, but these key changes are omitted. Claims that the park became “very popular” and “effective for people” are not shown by the plans. A clearer overview and accurate, specific comparisons would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic chronological direction, moving from the park in 1920 to its present-day facilities, and it uses a few linking expressions such as “But” and “Today.” However, the ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs or a consistent comparison. Several points are repeated, particularly that the park has become more popular and better organised, while the sequence of features is difficult to follow. The opening also refers to “limited source,” which does not establish a clear organising idea. Group the information into an introduction, an overview, and focused details comparing the earlier and current layouts. Use linking phrases to show specific changes, such as “whereas,” “was replaced by,” and “remains in the same position.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The writer attempts some task-related vocabulary, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “stage for musicians,” “amphitheatre” and “water feature.” These terms show awareness of the map’s subject. However, the range is limited and several choices or spelling errors make the description less precise, such as “limited source,” “pound for water plants,” “passaes,” and “opertunities.” Repeated general words such as “facilities” and “park” also leave important changes vague. Use accurate map vocabulary and verbs that describe change, for example, “replaced,” “retained,” and “relocated.” Check spelling carefully and avoid unsupported evaluative phrases such as “effective for people”; describe visible features instead.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly uses simple statements and makes some attempts to connect ideas, as in “But gradualy it growth.” However, control of sentence structure and verb forms is weak, and errors frequently make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “When it was opened it hasd,” “as the passaes it growthed,” and “now it become.” There are also problems with articles, agreement and sentence boundaries, as in “it has a one fountain” and the run-on sequence beginning “Today the park has many facilities.” Practise forming accurate past and present descriptions, such as “In 1920, the park had…” and “Today, it has…”. Use full stops to separate ideas and check subject–verb agreement.

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