Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Here is the map of GRANGE park. It shows two conditions when it was in 1920 and then nows. In 1920 the technology was less and many buildings are created without creating a map. Their were many changes they were created when it was in 1920. On the top left side they created the seats and at the down side they also created the seats. Their were also a rose a garden and then again their were also seats are provided. And then their is an entrance and then rose garden and also a pond for watering plants. And in centre their is a stage for musicians. When their is a music show they perform their here. And at some distance their is a fountain of water. It throws the water. And at right side their are also seats are provided. And at the down corner of right side their is also a Glasshouse. And their were many changes they do in todays park. Their is also a rose garden at right corner. But they provide a cafe on right corner and also a playground for children. In centre their is a rose garden and provide a seats on their four sides. And the other entrance they also provide Eldon street. Their is also water pond at right down corner. They do many changes nowhere.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify that the park has changed and mention several relevant features, including the central rose garden with seats around it, the café, children’s play area, amphitheatre and water feature. However, the response does not give a clear overview of the main changes, and some locations are misreported: the café is on the northern edge east of the entrance, not at the “right corner,” while the water feature is in the south-east corner, not a “water pond.” The 1920 description also confuses the central fountain and the stage, placing the stage in the centre. To strengthen the summary, state the major transformations first, then compare the old and new uses of the park’s central, western and eastern areas accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response follows a rough chronological order, describing the 1920 plan before the present-day park, and this gives the reader some sense of the comparison. However, ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs or grouped by area or type of change. Repeated links such as “And then,” “their is,” and “And at” make the account sound like a list, while references such as “they” and “their” are often unclear. The final sentence, “They do many changes nowhere,” does not provide a meaningful conclusion. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview of the main changes, and focused details comparing the two plans; use precise links such as “whereas,” “in contrast,” and “in the south-east.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “rose garden,” “entrance,” “fountain,” “Glasshouse,” and “playground for children,” so the reader can recognise several park features. However, the vocabulary is basic and repetitive, especially “created,” “provided,” and “changes,” and some choices are inaccurate or imprecise. For example, “water pond” does not describe the present-day water feature, and “right corner” is less precise than naming the north-east or south-east corner. Phrases such as “It throws the water” are also unsuitable for a formal map summary. Build a more precise range of location and change vocabulary, such as “occupies,” “was replaced by,” “along the northern edge,” and “in the south-east corner.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to describe locations and changes using simple clauses, but grammatical control is weak and errors occur throughout. Examples include “It shows two conditions when it was in 1920 and then nows,” “Their were many changes,” and “In centre their is a stage,” which show problems with tense, sentence structure, articles and subject–verb agreement. The repeated use of “there is/are” also limits sentence variety, and several long strings joined by “and then” are difficult to follow. Practise accurate past and present forms when comparing the plans, and use controlled comparison structures, for example, “The fountain was replaced by a rose garden” and “The pond has become a children’s play area.”

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