Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

If we compare the grange park today with the grange park in 1920 we see that if we start it from the left side the seats on the both left corner are replaced with amphitheatre for concernt and the rose garden in the lower left side is also removed if go more forward the both side seats are also removed and the stage for musicion and founation are both repaled with the ronse garden in midille with foursided bounded seats the entrance of both park is still same and cafe and childern play area replaced therose gaden and the pond of water plants the water feature are also added to the grange park there is also a underground car parking added to the today grange park as we look at whole the grange park is much more different from the grange park in 1920 because the many placese are changed and replaced my many other places.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important changes, including the central rose garden with surrounding seats, the café and play area replacing earlier features, and the new underground car-park entrance. You also note that the park’s two street entrances remain. However, the comparison is only partly clear and some details are inaccurate: the amphitheatre replaces the western stage area and south-west rose garden, not the seats at both left corners; the west-edge seats are not described as removed in the plan. The overview that the park is “much more different” is vague and does not clearly summarise the main pattern of change. A more precise overview and accurate descriptions of the locations would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a broad sequence through the park and uses a few linking expressions, such as “if we start it from the left side” and “as we look at whole.” This gives the reader some sense of movement through the comparison. However, nearly all the information is packed into one long sentence, so relationships between features are difficult to follow. The repeated “if” clauses and “also” do not create a clear progression, and references such as “both side seats” are unclear. Organise the report into an overview and separate paragraphs for the main areas or changes, using clear contrasts such as “whereas” and “in contrast.” Full stops would also help distinguish each point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “entrance,” “rose garden,” “pond,” “water feature,” and “replaced,” so the reader can recognise the topic and several changes. However, the range is limited and some choices are imprecise or repeated. Phrases such as “start it from the left side,” “go more forward,” and “much more different” are not natural ways to describe locations or compare plans. There are also frequent spelling errors in key terms, including “concernt,” “founation,” and “childern,” which can make details harder to understand. Build a more accurate set of location and change expressions, and check spelling of the map labels before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect several ideas in a complex sentence, but control is weak: the sentence beginning “If we compare…” continues through almost the entire report, with few clear sentence boundaries. Clause structures are often incomplete or awkward, as in “if we start it from the left side” and “if go more forward.” There are also problems with articles, agreement, and verb forms, for example “the both left corner are replaced” and “the entrance of both park is still same.” These errors frequently make the relationships between features difficult to follow. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then add a controlled range of comparison clauses, checking subject–verb agreement and articles.

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