Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given plan illustrates how the grange park look in 1920 and how it looks today.

Overall, there have been significant modification in the park today. Some new additions are amphitheatre for concerts, rose garden surrounding by seats, water feature, cafe, childern's play area and entrance undergound car park. Fountains, pond for plants, stage for musicians, have been replaced by the new amenities.

In 1920, there were seats in the north-eastern, the south-easter, and the south-eastren have now been moved to the surroundings of the rose garden only the seats in lelt side of each of the entrance remains. The stage for musicians is replaced by the amphitheatre for concerts. Furthermore, there is a rosegarden in the place of fountain, glasshouse is replaced by water feature, pond fo plants is replaced by childern's play area.

The rose garden on the north-western part of the park only remains, among the others the south-wastern have been removed others are replaced by cafe and water fountain. A new entrance undergound car park has been added.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main transformation from ornamental features to newer facilities, and your overview names several additions and replacements. The comparisons that the central fountain became a rose garden, the pond became a children’s play area, and the glasshouse was replaced by a water feature are relevant and accurate. You also note that the north-west rose garden remains and that an underground car-park entrance has been added. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the seats were not simply moved to surround the central garden; seats also remain in other areas, including by the entrances. The description of the rose gardens’ changes is difficult to follow, and the café’s location on the northern edge is not clearly reported. Select the key changes more precisely and explain their locations consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and two paragraphs of details. This gives the reader a basic route through the comparison. However, progression within the detail paragraphs is uneven: the third paragraph begins with seats, shifts to the stage and then lists several replacements, while the final paragraph repeats some changes already mentioned. Linking phrases such as “Furthermore” and “among the others” do not always make the relationships between ideas clear, and references such as “the others” are difficult to identify. Group the information by area or by what changed and what remained, and use clear references—for example, “the north-west rose garden was retained, whereas the other two were removed or replaced.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “amphitheatre,” “rose garden,” “water feature,” “replaced,” and “remains,” which helps communicate the main changes. There is some variety in how you describe additions and replacements. However, spelling errors such as “childern’s,” “undergound,” and “lelt,” along with forms such as “south-eastren” and “rosegarden,” reduce accuracy. Some choices are also imprecise: “water fountain” does not match the map’s “water feature,” and “entrance undergound car park” is not a natural phrase. Use the labels accurately and check spelling; phrases such as “entrance to the underground car park” and “seating surrounding the central garden” would be clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and more complex comparisons, including “The stage for musicians is replaced by the amphitheatre” and “The rose garden on the north-western part of the park only remains.” These structures show an effort to describe change over time, but control is inconsistent. The opening says “how the grange park look,” where the verb form and article are missing, and “there have been significant modification” has an agreement error. Past and present forms are also mixed in descriptions of the 1920 plan, and the long sentence beginning “In 1920, there were seats…” is difficult to parse because clauses run together. Use past tense for the original plan, present tense for today, and separate comparisons into complete sentences with clear punctuation.

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