Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

This plan illustrates how a public park was when opened in 1920 and at the present.

Overall, the park has significantly changed since the opening. While new areas and amenities have been built over the 106 years, other sectors of the park remained the same.

In 1920 there was a stage for musicians on the left side of the park, and next to it there was a fountain. Next to the north entrance, on the north-right wing there was one rose garden, followed by a pond for water plants. In front of those, there was a glasshouse. Besides the other rose garden, on the left side of the park, two more were construct, once facing north and the other one facing south. In addition, throughout the park several seats used to be placed.

The stage for musicians was replaced by the amphitheatre for concerts, and the fountain has been replaced by a rose garden with four seats on its surrondings. The old north rose garden and pond for water plants were converted into a cafe and a children play area consecutively. The previousely glasshouse was removed and a water feature was added, just next to the newly built entrance underground car park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You provide a clear overview that the park has changed substantially while some features remain, and you identify several important conversions: the stage became an amphitheatre, the central fountain was replaced by a rose garden, and the pond and glasshouse sites gained new uses. These comparisons show a sound grasp of the main changes. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the central rose garden is described as having four seats around it, whereas the plan shows seats on all four sides; the café and play area are said to replace the “old north rose garden and pond” without clearly locating them. You also omit that the north-west rose garden remains and that the entrances on both streets are retained. More precise coverage of these unchanged features and locations would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a description of the 1920 layout, and a paragraph on present-day changes. This gives the reader a generally logical route through the information. Linking phrases such as “Overall,” “In addition,” and “The stage … was replaced” help connect ideas. At times, however, the description becomes difficult to follow because several locations are packed into long sentences, particularly “Besides the other rose garden, on the left side …”. References such as “those” and “the old north rose garden” are not always precise, and the final paragraph does not clearly distinguish the central changes from those in the north and south-east. Grouping details by area and using clearer location references would improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a relevant range of map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “pond for water plants,” “amphitheatre,” “converted,” and “underground car park.” These terms communicate the main features and changes, and there is some variety in how you describe replacement. However, several choices are imprecise or unnatural for describing a plan: “north-right wing,” “in front of those,” and “on its surroundings” do not express locations clearly. There are also spelling errors in “surrondings” and “previousely,” and “construct” is not the appropriate form in “were construct.” Aim for standard directional language and accurate collocations, such as “north-east corner,” “along the southern edge,” and “was replaced by.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast clause in “While new areas and amenities have been built…” and passive constructions such as “was replaced by.” Most of the meaning remains understandable, but some grammatical errors reduce accuracy. For example, “two more were construct” needs a past participle (“constructed”), while “the old north rose garden and pond … were converted … consecutively” has an awkwardly formed sentence and unclear agreement between the paired features and their replacements. “A children play area” also needs a possessive form (“children’s”). Tense use shifts between past and present when describing the two plans. More consistent past-tense description of 1920 and present-tense description of today, alongside careful checking of articles and verb forms, would strengthen control.

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