Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The diagram illustrates the changes that have taken in Grange Park from 1920.

Overall, It can be seen the park has been significantly redeveloped with many facilities that are available for visitors. such as, entrance underground car park, a play ares for children and many more. Several places have relocated and replaced as well.

in 1920, the seating area was spreaded all around in the edges. there are three chunks of rose parks that are placed in the edges. there was a fountain which was situated in the centre of park to enhance the looks

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the park and gives a broad overview that it has been redeveloped, mentioning the underground car-park entrance and children’s play area. It also reports some 1920 features, including seating, rose gardens and the central fountain. However, the account is very incomplete: it stops before describing the present-day layout or making clear comparisons between the two plans. Important changes such as the amphitheatre, café, water feature and replacement of the pond and glasshouse are omitted. The response is also 55 words below the required minimum, which contributes to the limited coverage. To improve, describe the main changes in both plans and explain what was retained, replaced or added.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and then a paragraph about the 1920 plan. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, the progression is incomplete because the response ends without a present-day description or a concluding comparison. Connections between ideas are also weak; for example, “such as” introduces a fragment rather than a complete sentence, and the final details are simply listed. Use separate paragraphs for the overview, the original layout and the current layout, and link changes with clear expressions such as “whereas,” “has been replaced by,” and “remains.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses some relevant vocabulary for describing a park, including “fountain,” “seating area,” “rose parks” and “situated in the centre.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited, and several expressions are inaccurate or imprecise: “rose parks” should refer to rose gardens, while “chunks” is not suitable for describing landscaped areas. “Spreaded” is also an incorrect word form, and “play ares” contains a spelling error. The phrase “enhance the looks” is informal and vague for an academic map description. Build a more precise set of terms for locations and changes, such as “occupies,” “is positioned,” “was replaced by” and “along the northern edge.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a few sentence forms, including an overview sentence and a relative clause in “a fountain which was situated in the centre.” However, the range is narrow, and errors occur frequently enough to make the writing less controlled. Examples include “the changes that have taken” (missing “place”), “It can be seen the park” (missing “that”), and “in the centre of park” (missing an article). Sentence boundaries and capitalisation are also inconsistent: “such as” begins a fragment, and “in 1920” starts with a lowercase letter. Practise complete sentences with accurate articles and verb forms, and check punctuation and capitalisation when editing.

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