Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the figure provides a different changes in grange park plans since it is opened in 1920 and today.

Overall, the park know's a severall changes area . fountaine which was located just at main entrance in the past was remplaced by rose garden today moreover , stage for musiciens which was situated in the west of the park was transformed into Amphitheatre for concerts and pond for water turned cheldren's area in addition , the garden was remplaced by cafe

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify several relevant changes, including the replacement of the pond with a children’s play area and the former stage area becoming an amphitheatre. However, the response covers the plans only partially and contains an important factual error: the fountain was in the centre of the park, not beside the main entrance. The statement that the south-west rose garden was replaced by the amphitheatre is also missing, as is the change from the glasshouse to a water feature. There is no clear, complete overview of the park’s main transformations, and the response is substantially below the required 150 words. To improve, describe the main changes accurately and add comparisons covering the central, western, northern and south-eastern areas.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall shape: an opening sentence is followed by an overview beginning with “Overall,” and the changes are presented in a roughly comparative way. This gives the reader some sense of the purpose of the description. However, the ideas are compressed into one long, loosely connected sentence, with “moreover” and “in addition” linking several changes without clear boundaries. The final phrase, “the garden was replaced by cafe,” is not clearly connected to a specific location or former feature. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the detailed comparisons, and organise the details by area or by the features that changed. Clear sentence breaks and more precise referencing would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some task-relevant vocabulary, including “rose garden,” “main entrance,” “stage for musicians,” and “Amphitheatre for concerts.” These terms show that you can identify several features and describe changes. However, the range is limited, and frequent spelling and word-choice problems make parts of the response difficult to understand, as in “fountaine,” “remplaced,” “musiciens,” and “cheldren's area.” Some expressions are also imprecise: “different changes” and “turned” do not describe the map changes naturally. Build a small set of accurate map-description phrases, such as “was replaced by,” “was converted into,” and “in the north-east corner,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to use a complex sentence to connect several comparisons, and “which was located…” shows an effort to add a relative clause. However, the range of structures is limited, and errors are frequent enough to make the description difficult to follow. For example, “since it is opened in 1920 and today” has an incorrect tense and an unclear time comparison; “the park know's a severall changes area” does not form a grammatical clause; and “fountaine which was located…” lacks clear sentence punctuation. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention. Practise writing short, complete comparison sentences first, using accurate past and present forms—for example, “The pond was replaced by a play area”—then combine ideas only when the grammar remains clear.

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