Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The diagram illustrates a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Overall, the first picture show the grange park build in 1920 and the second picture is illustrates the grange park today. There is a big differene in two photos.

In 1920, the grange park is consturcted in old type. The entrance gate of the park is the front of eldon street. When people enter in the park left side of the entrance build a glasshouse and make sitting are for the people and left corner in the park make water plants and rose garden and creation fountain and stage for musicians the right side of the park.

Today development of grange park the entrane of the park is same side and remove area and fabrication a underground car parking for the vsiters and erection a childrens play area and cafe shop and build a amphitheatre for concerts.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the two time periods and mention several relevant features, including the glasshouse, water plants, rose garden, musicians’ stage, café, play area and amphitheatre. However, the description is only partial and some locations are confused: in 1920, the pond was in the north-east, while the rose gardens were in the north-west, south-west and near the northern edge; your account places these features unclearly and says the fountain and stage were on the right. You also omit important changes, such as the central fountain being replaced by a rose garden surrounded by seats and the glasshouse site becoming a water feature. The response is 140 words, below the 150-word minimum. A clearer overview and accurate, fuller comparisons are needed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, a brief overview, and separate descriptions of the park in 1920 and today. This gives the reader some sense of the timeline, and phrases such as “In 1920” and “Today” help signal the shift between periods. However, the progression within the descriptions is difficult to follow. The long sentence beginning “left corner in the park…” combines several locations and features without clear relationships, while “the right side of the park” does not make the preceding details easier to interpret. Use shorter, organised sentences and group features by area—for example, north, centre and south. Clearer linking and reference would make the comparisons easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “entrance,” “glasshouse,” “water plants,” “stage for musicians,” “children’s play area” and “amphitheatre for concerts.” These terms show an attempt to describe the map rather than relying entirely on general language. However, the range is limited, and several inaccurate or misspelled choices make the description harder to understand, such as “differene,” “consturcted,” “entrane,” “fabrication” and “erection.” Some phrases are also unnatural for describing a park, including “make sitting are” and “cafe shop.” Build a more precise set of location and change expressions, such as “is located in,” “was replaced by” and “was converted into,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to organise information into sentences and use time references such as “In 1920” and “Today,” but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently obscure relationships between features. For example, “the first picture show” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, and “the second picture is illustrates” combines incompatible verb forms. The sentence beginning “When people enter in the park” has an unclear structure, and the final sentence strings together several actions without a clear subject or consistent verb pattern. Most sentences rely on basic forms, with little accurate variety. Practise simple, complete map-description sentences first, then add controlled comparisons using forms such as “was replaced by” and “is now located.”

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