Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

As we can see plan of Grange Park in 1920 and today's the whole design is changes in a better way, like people who came here to watch music or theater we can clearly saw there was no proper sitting arrangement fro that in first plan, on the other hand we can also saw the upgrade on the stage for the artist and there is plenty of seats for the audience who love to watch the show.

And the second this i saw in both plans there no specific area for a children in 1920, therefore no they added a separate area dedicated to children to play and have there own fun time. Addition of cafe next to play area is brilliant idea in my point of view considering age group of some children they came park with there parents, so when thier kids playing and enjoying with there age group adults can also spent there time in cafe while watching thier kids safet.

One more change i like is the place of rose gander and love how they added seats close to it, for the people who love to sit next to roses it was missing in 1920, I feel when lovebirds came to this park and sit close to roses it automatically fell them special they love to sit there for hours and have a lovely conversation.

Last thing i want to talk about is the underground parking, as we all now in today worlds uses or four wheeler is increasinf day by day, so, for there convenience and to welcome more people it the park adding a car parking area is good move. and there is one more thing i can see it upgrading a fountain to a new water feature i think its a common upgradation by time there is no such view on fountain and water feature because i think in 1920 fountain are more fascinating therefore today people like upgradaed version of fountain like water features.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several relevant changes, including the new children’s play area, café, amphitheatre, central rose garden with seats, and underground car-park entrance. However, the response is mainly a personal reaction to the park rather than a neutral summary of the plans. The opening claim that the design changed “in a better way” is evaluative, and several explanations about parents, children, and visitors are not shown in the visual. Some details are also inaccurate: the 1920 plan already had a musicians’ stage, and the amphitheatre replaces the western stage and south-west rose garden, rather than simply upgrading the stage. To strengthen the response, give a concise overview of the main transformations, then compare the locations and uses of features without adding opinions or unsupported reasons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response is divided into paragraphs, and phrases such as “And the second thing,” “One more change,” and “Last thing” signal that you are moving between features. This gives the reader some basic organisation. However, the sequence feels like a list of personal observations rather than a clear comparison of the two plans. The opening paragraph combines several points, while later paragraphs include lengthy speculation that interrupts the description. Some links are awkward or unclear, including “therefore no they added” and “and there is one more thing.” Organise the response around an overview followed by grouped changes—for example, central and western features, then the northern and southern areas—and use direct comparisons to make the progression clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “dedicated area,” “audience,” “underground parking,” and “water feature,” so the reader can recognise many of the changes you mean. However, word choice and spelling errors are frequent enough to make parts of the response difficult to follow. Examples include “rose gander,” “upgradaed,” “increasinf,” and “safet.” Some phrases are also imprecise or unnatural, such as “proper sitting arrangement” and “upgrade on the stage.” The repeated use of “I saw,” “I think,” and “love” limits the formal, descriptive vocabulary needed for this task. Aim for precise map language such as “is located,” “was replaced by,” and “occupies the north-east corner,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences using connectors such as “therefore,” “while,” and “considering,” but these complex structures are often faulty, and many sentences contain errors that make the relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “As we can see plan of Grange Park” is missing an article and has an incomplete structure, while “the whole design is changes” has an incorrect verb form. There are also repeated problems with agreement and tense, as in “there was no specific area” followed by “there added,” and with sentence boundaries, especially in the final paragraph. Use shorter, controlled sentences first, maintain past tense for the 1920 plan and present tense for today, and check articles, verb forms, and punctuation before attempting longer explanations.

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