Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The picture presents the public park build in 1920 & now both are different in their own aspects .

In the first picture of 1920 park , which depicts that in 1920 people are accessed to only basic needs as we can see in the picture that there are only basic things to like gate for entrance , rose garden , fountain , seats to relax , water pond. whereas there are things to enjoy too like stage for musicians and things to enhance beauty of park and attract public .

Whereas,In second picture of todays's public park is more attractive beacuse Now public parks not only fulfill basic required but equipped with many ammenities & more ways to have more fun , they not only look more beautiful but more attractive for public like cafe , seperate children play that is most attractive for parents , Amphitheatre for concert .

In my opinion Public Park now are more advance and enjoyable as compared to 1920.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad contrast between the park in 1920 and today, and mention several relevant features, including the fountain, rose garden, pond, musicians’ stage, café, children’s play area and concert amphitheatre. However, the response mainly describes general impressions rather than accurately summarising the plans. It does not explain key changes in location, such as the central fountain being replaced by a rose garden surrounded by seats, or the pond and glasshouse being replaced by a play area and water feature. The claim that the modern park is “more attractive” is an opinion, not a map feature. To make the summary more complete, give a clear overview of the main changes and compare the locations of the facilities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable progression: it discusses the 1920 park first, then the present-day park, and ends with a concluding opinion. This helps the reader follow the broad comparison. Paragraphing also separates the two periods. However, the ideas within each paragraph are often presented as a list, and the repeated contrast marker “Whereas” does not always connect the sentences smoothly. The opening and conclusion add little to the map summary, while the central changes are not organised into a clear comparison. Use a concise overview followed by grouped details—for example, changes in the centre and western area, then changes around the edges—and use linking phrases such as “by contrast” and “while” to show relationships precisely.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “rose garden,” “fountain,” “seats,” “café” and “amphitheatre,” so the reader can identify several park features. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “attractive” and “enhance beauty.” However, vocabulary is often imprecise or unnatural: “basic needs” does not describe park facilities, and “seperate children play” is not a clear or accurate label. Spelling and word-form errors, including “beacuse,” “ammenities” and “todays's,” are noticeable. Aim for precise map language and natural collocations, such as “facilities,” “children’s play area” and “the park has been redesigned.” Avoid evaluative claims when neutral descriptions are more appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a contrast between the two plans and a clause beginning “as we can see.” However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, as in “In the first picture of 1920 park, which depicts that…” and “Whereas,In second picture…”. These constructions have unclear or incomplete links between clauses. There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement and sentence boundaries, for example “public parks… is more attractive” and the missing article in “In second picture.” Capitalisation and spacing around punctuation are inconsistent. Use shorter, complete sentences to report the map accurately, then add controlled comparisons with “while” or “whereas.” Check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb and that singular and plural forms agree.

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