Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

There are two different pictures of grange public park, the first picture shows the layout when it first opened in 1920 and second picture shows the same park but today. Basically, it is a comparison between same place but in different years.

The park had two entrances in 1920 named as arnold avenue and eldon street and today's park also has two entrances with same names. In 1920, there wa a fountain in the center of the park but today there is a rose garden surounded by seats. In 1920, on the left side of fountain there was a stage for musicians but today there is an amphitheatre fr concerts.

In 1920, there was the glasshouse on the right side of the eldon street entrance but today there is a water feature. In 1920, there was no underground car parking but today there is an underground car parking. On the map, there was pound for water plants in1920 but today's map shows children's play area.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important changes, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden with seats, the musicians’ stage being replaced by an amphitheatre, and the pond and glasshouse being replaced by a play area and water feature. These comparisons are relevant and generally match the plans. However, the response does not give a clear overview of the park’s main transformation, and some details are incomplete: for example, it does not mention the café, the north-west rose garden that remains, or the changed position of the south-west rose garden. The statement that the park has “two entrances” is also imprecise, since the current plan additionally marks an underground car-park entrance. Select the main changes more fully and summarise them in an overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response is arranged in a generally understandable order: it introduces the two plans, then compares the entrances and central area before describing changes around the edges. Paragraph breaks help separate the introduction from the details. Linking phrases such as “but today” make the comparisons easy to follow, although their repeated use makes the progression somewhat mechanical. The opening repeats the idea that the plans show the same park in different years rather than providing a useful overview. Some references, such as “on the left side,” depend on the reader interpreting the map’s orientation. Grouping changes by area or by what was replaced, and using clearer transitions, would make the organisation more purposeful.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing map changes, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “stage for musicians,” “amphitheatre,” and “water feature.” These terms communicate the main features, and the repeated contrast between “in 1920” and “today” is clear. However, some wording is imprecise or repetitive: “different pictures” and “comparison between same place” are less natural than language describing plans and changes, while “on the left side” is less precise than a compass direction. There are also spelling errors, including “surounded,” “fr,” and “pound,” which reduce accuracy. Use more precise location vocabulary and check spelling, especially for labels taken directly from the plan.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

Most of your sentences communicate the comparisons clearly, and you use both simple statements and a contrast structure, as in “there was a fountain … but today there is a rose garden.” However, the range of sentence forms is limited, with several sentences following the same pattern. Some grammatical errors remain: “the same park but today” needs a clearer clause structure, “the same names” would be more naturally expressed with an article and possessive construction, and “there was no underground car parking” is awkwardly formed for describing a feature on a plan. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly for proper names and the extra space after “fountain.” Vary sentence structures and proofread articles, clause links, and punctuation.

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