Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The image ilustrates us about the difference in grange park arnold avenue in 1920 and today. From the image it is very clear that there is a clear difference in arnold avenue back in 1920 and today.

Overall, there is a fountain in the centre of public park in 1920 while there is a rose garden right now in the middle of the park.

When we talk about in 1920 there is a pond on the top right corner and glasshouse on the lower right side. There is also a stage for musicians near the fountain area. Three rose gardens are also present in the map.

While when we look upon todays map, there is a huge difference. Like fountain from the middle is being changed with rose garden. Glass house is also being replaced by water feature and also there is childern play area in the top right corner. there is a new amphitheatre for concerts.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main change in the park’s centre: the fountain in 1920 was replaced by a rose garden, and you mention several other changes, including the pond becoming a children’s play area and the glasshouse becoming a water feature. These details are relevant and generally match the plans. However, the overview is narrow, and the comparison is incomplete: you do not mention that the western area became an amphitheatre, the café was added on the northern edge, or the underground car-park entrance appeared. The statement that there are three rose gardens is accurate for 1920, but the response does not explain how their locations or number changed. A broader overview and more precise comparisons of the main transformations would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the 1920 and present-day plans. This gives the reader a basic chronological progression, and phrases such as “Overall” and “When we talk about in 1920” signal shifts between sections. However, the linking is sometimes mechanical or unclear. The opening repeats the idea of a difference, while “While when we look upon todays map” is an awkward transition, and the final paragraph lists changes without clearly grouping them by location. Use a more direct introduction, then organise the details by area or by feature, explicitly comparing what was removed and what replaced it. This would strengthen progression and make relationships between details clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing the plans, including “fountain,” “pond,” “glasshouse,” “rose gardens,” and “amphitheatre.” These terms help communicate the main features, and “replaced” is a useful choice for describing change. However, the range of language for comparing locations and developments is limited, with repeated general wording such as “difference” and “changed.” Some choices are inaccurate or informal for an academic report, including “huge difference” and “right now”; spelling errors such as “ilustrates” and “childern” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise phrases such as “was converted into,” “is situated in the north-east,” and “the layout has been substantially altered.” This would make the description more formal and specific.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few different sentence forms, including the overview beginning “Overall” and the contrast introduced by “While.” Most of the intended meaning can be understood, but grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “The image ilustrates us about the difference” has an incorrect sentence pattern, and “there is a pond … and glasshouse” needs more accurate article use and parallel phrasing. Tense and sentence boundaries also need attention: “there is a new amphitheatre” shifts into the present without a clear comparison, and the final “there is” begins a new sentence with a lowercase letter. Practise accurate past-tense descriptions of the 1920 plan and present-tense descriptions of today, alongside controlled compound sentences.

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