Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given road map demonstrate a public park when it inagurated in 1920 and the same park today.

Overall many modification has been added to the park and giving complete diffrent look as it was 1920.The very first precisely opposite to entrence there were fountain which is removed and added rose garden and around the garden there are four seats which gives diffrent look of garden. The second change to the park is near to the entrence is cafe which was rose garden before . The third one is children's play area which was before pond for water plants while stage for muscians have been modified to Amphitheater for concert some area has been placed exactly leave like it was before the necssary changes they have placed as it is demand for today's life like there were not underground entrence before and last change is water feature which placed on the place of glass house so overall many modification has been change the park completly as it was in 1920 .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation clearly: the central fountain is replaced by a rose garden, the pond becomes a children’s play area, and the glasshouse site becomes a water feature. You also note the café and the change from a musicians’ stage to a concert amphitheatre, so the response covers several important comparisons. The overview that the park has changed substantially is relevant, but it is not fully developed: you could distinguish the features that remain from those that were replaced. Some details are imprecise, such as saying there are “four seats” around the central garden; the plan shows seats on all four sides, not necessarily only four seats. Mentioning the retained north-west rose garden and the new underground car-park entrance would make the account more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response includes a broad overview and then attempts to organise changes using “The second change” and “The third one,” which gives the reader some sense of sequence. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several comparisons are packed into one long sentence, especially the section beginning “while stage for musicians…” and continuing through the underground entrance. The opening also runs directly into the overview without clear paragraphing. Some linking phrases, such as “the very first precisely opposite,” are unclear, and “some area has been placed exactly leave like it was before” does not make the relationship between unchanged and altered areas understandable. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and grouped changes, and connect each old feature directly to its replacement.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “pond for water plants,” “children’s play area,” and “water feature,” which helps communicate the main changes. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “modified to” and “underground entrance.” However, spelling errors (“inagurated,” “diffrent,” “muscians”) and repeated general wording such as “change” and “placed” reduce precision. Some combinations are unnatural, including “complete different look” and “as it was 1920.” Choose accurate map verbs and collocations, for example “was replaced by,” “is located,” and “remains unchanged.” This would make the comparisons clearer and give the vocabulary more flexibility without requiring unnecessarily complex words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, including comparisons using “which” and “while.” However, the longer structures are often difficult to control, and several errors make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “many modification has been added” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “the same park today” follows an incomplete opening clause. Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “there were fountain” and the extended final sentence, which joins many separate ideas without clear punctuation. Aim for shorter, complete sentences and check agreement, articles, and tense. For instance: “In 1920, a fountain stood in the centre. Today, it has been replaced by a rose garden surrounded by seats.”

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