Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

These tables illustrated how the Grange park was in 1920 and today. The North still remains as the entrance till these moment.

Opposite the entrance in 1920, there's a fountain while in today's settings there is rose garden with four seats (4). Then we have another entrance that leads to Eldon street in both layouts.

On the other hand, the 1920 illustrated that on the south-east and north-east we have glasshouse, seats, pond for water plants, and rose garden while in today's building layout on the south-east, there are entrance underground park, water features, children's play area, and cafe.

in conclusion, the ancient park layout shows that on the north-west and south-west, there fours (4) seats, two seats were up and down each, two rose gardens, that's one are on both side each. Then there's a stage for music in the middle of the two rose garden. while on the modern layout, on the north-west and south-west there's one rose garden up and one amphitheatre for concert.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant changes, including the central fountain being replaced by a rose garden and the addition of a café, play area and underground car-park entrance. However, the response only partially summarises the plans: it lacks a clear overview of the park’s main transformation, and some locations are misreported. For example, the glasshouse was on the southern edge, not in the south-east together with the seats and pond; the pond was in the north-east. The statement that the north remains the entrance is also unclear, since entrances are shown at both the north and south in each plan. To improve, give a concise overview first, then compare the main areas accurately, including the amphitheatre and the features that remained or changed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has some paragraphing and uses basic linking expressions such as “On the other hand” and “in conclusion,” so the reader can recognise an attempt to organise the comparison. However, the progression is not consistently logical: the second paragraph groups several features by direction, while the final paragraph returns to the western areas without clearly connecting them to the earlier points. “In conclusion” introduces more details rather than summarising the main changes. Some references, such as “the North” and “these moment,” are difficult to interpret. Organise the report into a clear overview followed by paragraphs comparing the northern and central areas, then the western and southern areas. Use linking words only where they accurately show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a park, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “pond for water plants,” and “amphitheatre.” This gives the response a minimally adequate range for the topic. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural and sometimes make the meaning less clear: “tables” should be “plans,” “today’s building layout” does not describe a park plan, and “entrance underground park” is not a clear name for the feature. “The North” is also imprecise when referring to the northern entrance. Aim for accurate map vocabulary and natural collocations, such as “the current layout,” “underground car-park entrance,” and “in the north-east corner.” Avoid repeating “layout” and “rose garden” where more precise phrasing is possible.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including comparisons with “while,” but control is uneven and errors sometimes make relationships difficult to follow. For example, “The North still remains as the entrance till these moment” has problems with tense, article use and sentence construction; “there fours (4) seats” also has incorrect agreement and number form. The sentence beginning “On the other hand, the 1920 illustrated that…” is not grammatically well formed, and punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, particularly after full stops. Practise building clear comparison sentences with a subject and verb in each clause, for example, “In 1920, a fountain stood in the centre, whereas today a rose garden occupies this area.” Check articles, plurals and verb agreement when editing.

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