Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The Grange park was openend in 1920, at the time of opening, it consists of multiple features like it had a pond for water plants, multiple seats, a stage for musicians, a fountain, glasshouse, and multiple rose gardens as well. Along these all features it do had 2 entrance opposite to each other at that time. And, the Grange park we have today is quite different from the one at time of opening. Like, many of things have been changed, removed or replaced with any other feature: For example; in place of pond for water plants now there is a children's play area and beside it where there was a rose garden now there is a cafe and also, the place where there was a glasshouse there's now a water feature and if we talk about the fountain, it had been removed and instead of it there's a rose garden with seats on all sides of it. Also, a underground car park is introduced which has entrance from the back side of water feature. Similarly the in the place of stage for musicians now there a amphitheatre for concerts.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation clearly: the park has changed substantially, with the pond becoming a play area, the glasshouse replaced by a water feature, and the central fountain replaced by a rose garden surrounded by seats. You also mention the new café, concert amphitheatre and underground car-park entrance, so the response covers many important features and comparisons. This is a strong account of the changes, but it is not fully balanced: the north-west rose garden remains, and the two street entrances are retained, yet neither point is clearly reported. The opening is mainly a list of 1920 features rather than a concise overview of the most significant changes. Include the unchanged features and organise the overview around what was retained, replaced and added to make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response follows a generally understandable sequence, moving from the park’s original features to changes in the present-day layout. Linking expressions such as “For example” and “Similarly” help signal comparisons, and the reader can usually follow which old feature corresponds to which new one. However, the writing is presented as one long paragraph, and several ideas are joined into an extended sentence with repeated “and” and “also.” The opening list also delays a clear overview of the main changes. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and for the key comparisons, and group changes by area or by what was replaced. More precise referencing would also help: “beside it” and “the back side” are less clear than naming the relevant park area.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of map vocabulary, including “pond for water plants,” “stage for musicians,” “amphitheatre for concerts” and “water feature.” These terms make the locations and functions understandable, and you attempt to describe change with phrases such as “removed or replaced.” Some word choices and collocations are awkward or repetitive, however: “multiple features,” “many of things,” and “introduced” are less natural in this context. There are also spelling and form slips, including “openend” and “cafe.” Aim for concise, precise language typical of map reports, such as “several facilities,” “many features,” and “a café was added.” Varying “there was” and “now there is” with “was replaced by” would also improve fluency.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer comparative sentences, including the sentence describing the pond, café and water feature, and the meaning is generally recoverable. However, control is uneven, especially in verb forms, articles, agreement and sentence boundaries. For example, “it consists” should be “it consisted” when describing 1920, while “it do had” and “now there a amphitheatre” are faulty constructions. The opening comma splice joins two complete clauses, and the long sentence beginning “For example” would be clearer if divided into shorter sentences. Articles also need attention in phrases such as “a underground car park.” Practise accurate past-tense descriptions and use a mix of shorter sentences and controlled clauses to make comparisons without overloading them.

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