Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Here are two plans of a public park. First plan shows its old version of 1920 and the second plan is its modern and present form.

The Grange Park have the main entertaining points like fountain, glasshouse,stage for musicians, rose gardens, children play area, cafe, amphitheater for concerts and water features.

Old Grange Park contains seats and rose gardens along the boundary walls while seatings and a rose garden is present in the center of park now a days. Antique park have a pond for water plants while recent park have a water feature in the bottom corner of park. Stage for musicians

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the two plans and mentions several relevant features, including the fountain, glasshouse, pond, rose garden and modern water feature. However, it only responds minimally to the task: it does not give a clear overview of the main changes, and most locations and comparisons are omitted. For example, it does not explain that the central fountain was replaced by a rose garden surrounded by seats, or that the western stage and south-west garden gave way to an amphitheatre. The final phrase, “Stage for musicians,” is unfinished. The response is also 47 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to summarise the plans adequately. Develop a complete overview and compare the key changes by location.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to move from the older plan to the present one, and the contrast signalled by “while” helps connect two ideas. However, the information is not arranged into a clear, complete progression. The opening lists features from both plans without explaining their locations or grouping them meaningfully, and the next paragraph shifts between boundary seating, the central area and the pond without a consistent structure. The final words, “Stage for musicians,” form an incomplete fragment and interrupt the flow. Use a short introduction and overview, then organise comparisons by area—for example, the north, centre and south/west—and connect each change explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses some relevant map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “rose gardens,” “pond for water plants” and “water feature,” so the reader can identify several features. There is also an attempt to vary wording with “old,” “modern,” “recent” and “antique.” However, some choices are imprecise or unnatural for a formal map description: “entertaining points” is not a natural label for park facilities, and “boundary walls” is not supported by the plan, which shows park edges beside streets. “Bottom corner” is vague, while “seatings” is not the usual uncountable form for this context. Prefer precise location language such as “north-east corner” and standard terms such as “facilities” and “seating.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and a contrast using “while,” but the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors recur in basic sentence construction. For example, “First plan shows” needs an article, and “The Grange Park have” has subject–verb disagreement. In “Old Grange Park contains seats and rose gardens … while seatings and a rose garden is present,” the plural subject does not agree with “is,” and the sentence combines the two time periods awkwardly. The final “Stage for musicians” is a sentence fragment. Use complete sentences with clear subjects, maintain past and present tenses consistently, and check articles and agreement when describing each plan.

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