Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Grange park in(1920):

First we see a tow entarnce north or south side and the east side we see a stage for musicians and the sentar of the park we see a beautiful water fountain and north west corner pound for water plantes. And the south or west we see a beautiful glasshouse . In this park three rose gardens first garen is Arnold avenue entrance is and the other tow garden is north or eist side south eist.

Grange park(today):

This park we see a tow entrance and one cafe and the sentar of the park rose garden and the side seats this garden we see a beautiful children,s play area and a beautiful water feature.In the park we see a Amphitheatre for concerts . We see entrance underdround car parking.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the two time periods and mention several relevant features, including the fountain, rose gardens, café, play area and amphitheatre. However, the account is very limited and does not give a clear overview of the main changes. Some locations are misreported or unclear: the stage was west of the fountain, not on the east side, and the pond was in the north-east corner, not the north-west. The glasshouse was on the southern edge, rather than simply “south or west.” Important changes, such as the central fountain being replaced by a rose garden with seats around it, are not clearly explained. The response is also 18 words below the 150-word minimum. Develop a concise overview and compare the main locations more accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic chronological structure, with separate sections for the park in 1920 and today, so the reader can recognise that you are describing two plans. However, ideas within each section are often joined in long, unclear strings, such as “First we see a tow entarnce north or south side and the east side…” This makes the sequence of features difficult to follow, and there is little comparison between the plans. Repeated openings such as “we see” and “In this park” also make the writing feel repetitive rather than progressively organised. Use a clear overview followed by one paragraph for each plan, and group features by area or by what changed. Linking phrases such as “By contrast” and “Meanwhile” can clarify comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “rose gardens,” “fountain,” “glasshouse,” “café” and “amphitheatre,” which helps identify several map features. However, the range is limited and repeated general wording such as “we see” and “beautiful” does not describe locations or changes precisely. Several spelling errors, including “entarnce,” “sentar,” “plantes” and “underdround,” make parts of the response harder to understand. Some phrases are also imprecise, for example “a tow entrance” where you mean two entrances. Build a bank of accurate location language—such as “in the north-east corner,” “along the southern edge” and “to the west of”—and use neutral descriptive vocabulary rather than subjective adjectives.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Your writing mainly uses simple present-tense statements, and the reader can sometimes identify the feature being described. However, sentence structures are very limited, and frequent errors in sentence formation, articles, agreement and punctuation can obscure meaning. For example, “the sentar of the park we see a beautiful water fountain” lacks a clear grammatical connection between the location and the feature, while “a Amphitheatre” has an incorrect article. The long opening description also joins several clauses without clear punctuation. Practise complete patterns such as “A fountain stood in the centre” and “Today, this has been replaced by…”. Use full stops to separate ideas and check articles and singular/plural forms.

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