Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The maps illustrates the difference on Grange Park when it was first opened in 1920 with how it is today.

Overall, the park map has been changed completely, like there is Amphitheatre area for concert today, which was a stage for musicians in 1920, and a rose garden which was originally a Fountain.

Main changes in features are Cafe and children's play area, in 1920, there was no cafe and children area at all, but it had a pond for water plants. Another major change was in seating area, in 1920, there were seats on the egdes of the park while in new layout we have seats surounding the rose garden.

Today park also hava a Water feature area where the glasshouse was when the park was build, and an entrance to underground car park at the south east of the park which wasn't there when the park was first build

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main transformation from a formal garden layout to a park with newer facilities, and several comparisons are accurate: the central fountain becomes a rose garden, the pond site becomes a children’s play area, and the glasshouse site becomes a water feature. The overview also notes the concert amphitheatre and underground car-park entrance. However, some important changes are only partly covered: the north-west rose garden remains, the café replaces a rose garden, and the amphitheatre also occupies the former south-west garden area. The statement that the park has changed “completely” is too broad because some features and the entrances remain. More precise coverage of what stayed, moved or was replaced would make the summary more complete and clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, an overview and paragraphs describing particular changes. This helps the reader follow the comparison, and phrases such as “Another major change” signal a new point. However, the progression within the body is sometimes loose: the second paragraph combines the café, play area and pond, while the final paragraph adds the water feature and car-park entrance without a clear spatial grouping. Some links are also mechanical or unclear, particularly “but it had a pond” and “while in new layout.” Organising details by area—for example, northern, central and southern changes—and using clearer references to the two plans would create smoother cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of relevant vocabulary, including “Amphitheatre,” “rose garden,” “pond for water plants,” “seating area” and “underground car park.” These terms make the main features understandable, and you attempt useful comparison language such as “originally” and “where.” Some choices are imprecise or repetitive, however: “changed completely” overstates the extent of change, and “area” is repeated in “Amphitheatre area” and “Water feature area.” There are also spelling errors, including “egdes,” “surounding,” “hava” and “build,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise map vocabulary, such as “was replaced by,” “remained unchanged” and “in the south-east corner,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “where the glasshouse was” and a contrast with “while.” The main relationships between features are generally understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “The maps illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “the difference on Grange Park … with how it is today” uses an awkward comparison structure. The sentence beginning “Main changes in features are Cafe…” is a fragment-like construction, and the final sentence lacks a full stop. Articles and tense forms also need attention in phrases such as “when the park was build.” Practise accurate comparison patterns and divide long sentences into complete, punctuated clauses.

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