Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two pictures illustrates the development in a public from its opening to present time and what changes are there from 1920 to now.

As seen in both the maps that the fountain remove from the park. One of the rose garden of south-west sifted to the centre near the both entrance, the left side seats are put in surrounding of the rose garden. The stage for musicians are also not there in todays plan. It is seen that new Amphitheatre are constructed for concert compare to old map. Water feature are also available in new plan of Grange Park it replace glasshouse. The location of one rose garden of north-west side are intact. Pond for water plant and one rose garden are replaced by children's play are cafe. The new underground parking are also build today. Both the entrances are remain unchanged from it opening.

Overall, some old things replaced by new one and some relocate from it original place , children's paly area, parking space and new Amphitheatre are the major changes from the past.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify several important changes accurately: the central fountain is replaced by a rose garden, the western stage area becomes an amphitheatre, the pond site becomes a children’s play area, and the glasshouse site gains a water feature. You also note that the north-west rose garden and the two street entrances remain. This covers the main transformation and includes relevant comparisons. However, some details are unclear or imprecise: the south-west rose garden did not move to the centre; the central rose garden replaced the fountain, while the south-west area became the amphitheatre. The café’s location and the underground car-park entrance could also be described more clearly. The overview recognises broad change, but could better summarise the park’s overall reorganisation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from a brief introduction to a series of comparisons and then an overall statement. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, the progression within the main paragraph is not consistently clear: features are listed in quick succession, and the relationship between them is sometimes difficult to follow. For example, “One of the rose garden of south-west sifted to the centre” combines two separate changes and creates confusion. Linking expressions such as “in contrast,” “while,” and “in addition” could help distinguish replacements from features that remain. The final overview also repeats some details rather than drawing the main changes together. Clearer grouping by area or by unchanged and changed features would improve organisation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “stage for musicians,” “Amphitheatre,” and “underground parking,” so the reader can identify many of the features being compared. There are also attempts to describe change with words such as “replaced” and “intact.” However, the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning less precise. For instance, “sifted” does not clearly express that a feature was replaced, and “public” is incomplete in “a public.” Spelling and word-form errors such as “paly” and “todays” also reduce control. Aim for precise map language, for example “was converted into,” “remained unchanged,” and “was located in the north-east corner,” while checking spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, and the main message is generally recoverable. However, grammatical control is uneven, with errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction. Examples include “The two pictures illustrates,” “the fountain remove,” and “The stage for musicians are also not there”; these should use appropriate subject–verb agreement and past or present passive forms. Some sentences are also incomplete or awkwardly joined, as in “As seen in both the maps that the fountain remove from the park.” Try forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use passive structures consistently to describe changes: “The fountain was removed and replaced by a rose garden.” More accurate control of these patterns would make the comparisons easier to understand.

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