Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The two images show the comparison of the construction of Grange park in 1920 and today's date.
In 1920, Grande park had two entrances, first entrance was from the front of Eldon street and second entrance was left side near Arnold avenue. As you enter the park from Arnold avenue, you will find a fountain which is in the middle of both entrance. The entrance has two rose garden on the left and right side. The right side rose garden has two seats and both are located on the sides of the rose garden. On the left side, rose garden has small pond for plants to water them. There is stage for musicans as well which is near by fountain. Th epark consist of a glass house too and it has seat near by.
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AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 2.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 2.5
The response identifies several features of the 1920 plan, including the fountain, stage, rose gardens, pond and glasshouse, so some relevant details are present. However, it does not provide a clear overview of the main changes, and the description contains important location errors: the second entrance was on Eldon Street, not “left side near Arnold avenue,” and the pond was in the north-east corner rather than beside the left-side rose garden. Most importantly, the response stops at “In today,” leaving the present-day plan and the comparison almost entirely unreported. It is also 14 words below the required minimum. To improve, complete the account of today’s layout and summarise the major replacements and additions accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response has a basic chronological sequence, beginning with the 1920 plan and then attempting to move to the present with “In today.” This gives the reader a simple organising principle, and phrases such as “As you enter” and “On the left side” help signal spatial relationships. However, the unfinished final paragraph prevents any progression to the current plan or a concluding comparison. Within the 1920 description, details are presented as a list, with limited linking between features, and “The entrance” is unclear because two entrances have just been mentioned. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview, the original layout and the current layout, and connect changes with clear comparison markers such as “whereas” and “has been replaced by.”
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses some relevant vocabulary for describing a park, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “pond,” “stage” and “glass house.” These terms make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited, and several expressions are imprecise or awkward for a map description, such as “the construction of” the park, “today’s date,” and “two images show the comparison.” There are also spelling errors in “Grande,” “musicans” and “Th epark,” which reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of map-description phrases, including language for location and change, and check spelling carefully. For example, describe what a feature “is located beside” or “was replaced by,” rather than relying on repeated “near by” and “side” phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response communicates some simple relationships using basic sentence forms, for example, “There is stage for musicans as well which is near by fountain.” It also attempts a longer sentence with “As you enter the park from Arnold avenue,” showing some willingness to vary structure. However, grammatical control is inconsistent: articles are missing in “There is stage” and “near by fountain,” and the sentence “The entrance has two rose garden” has problems with number and meaning. The opening phrase “show the comparison of the construction” is also awkwardly formed, while “In today” is an incomplete sentence. Aim for complete, accurately formed sentences, check articles and singular/plural agreement, and use past and present forms consistently when comparing the two plans.
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