Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The plan illustrates a public park which called Grange Park, was opened in 1920 initially.
Overall, it can be seen that a rectangular area with access from Arnold Avenue north side and from Eldon Street south side. There are two entrance for people in and the old park and today's park position has lot of changes.
In 1920, Fountain was occupied certer of the park and the stage for musician was situated next to the fountain. A glasshouse was situated the south of corner, nearby Eldon Street. There was a pond for water plants which was situated the corner of northwest. There were three rose garden with sitting area around the whole park.
For the present park there are huge cha
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response identifies the park and mentions several relevant features, including the fountain, musicians’ stage, glasshouse and rose gardens. However, it only partially reports the changes: the present-day description stops at “there are huge cha…”, so key developments such as the café, play area, amphitheatre, central rose garden and underground car-park entrance are not explained. Some locations are also misreported: the pond was in the north-east, not the north-west, and the glasshouse was on the southern edge rather than simply “the south of corner.” The overview is vague and does not summarise the main transformation. The response is 121 words, below the required 150; develop the comparison and complete the present-day account.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction and overview to the 1920 layout and then the present-day park. This gives the reader some organisation, and time markers such as “In 1920” and “For the present park” help distinguish the two periods. However, the progression is incomplete because the final paragraph ends abruptly at “there are huge cha…”, leaving the comparison unfinished. Connections between details are also limited, and the overview repeats the idea of change without specifying the main changes. To improve, use a complete paragraph for today’s layout and link each feature to its former use or location, for example, explaining that the play area replaced the pond.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses some relevant map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “stage,” “glasshouse,” “pond” and “rose garden,” and attempts to describe locations with phrases such as “next to” and “nearby.” However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or awkward, which sometimes makes the layout difficult to picture. For example, “the corner of northwest” does not clearly express the pond’s position, while “sitting area” is not the same as the labelled seats. The phrase “huge cha…” is incomplete and prevents the reader from understanding the intended point. Build a more precise set of location and change expressions, and check spelling and word forms before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response communicates some basic information through simple sentences, but grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “a public park which called Grange Park” is missing the verb structure needed for a relative clause, and “There are two entrance” has a number-agreement error. Articles and sentence construction are also problematic in “Fountain was occupied certer of the park” and “A glasshouse was situated the south of corner.” The overview contains a sentence fragment-like construction: “a rectangular area with access…” These errors make several statements difficult to follow, although the reader can infer the general topic. Practise complete sentence patterns for describing locations and use consistent past tense for 1920 and present tense for today.
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