Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The plan illustrates a public park which called Grange Park, was opened in 1920 initially.

Overall, it can be seen that a rectangular area with access from Arnold Avenue north side and from Eldon Street south side. There are two entrance for people in and the old park and today's park position has lot of changes.

In 1920, Fountain was occupied certer of the park and the stage for musician was situated next to the fountain. A glasshouse was situated the south of corner, nearby Eldon Street. There was a pond for water plants which was situated the corner of northwest. There were three rose garden with sitting area around the whole park.

The park has altared considerbly since then. Now, there is the largest rose garden in the midle of the park and some seats surrounded the area. The stage for musician area is totally change by amphitheatre for concerts with a sitting area. A square shape childern's area is occupied the opposite of north cornar where a pond stood before. Glasshouse is totally alterned with a water feature. A small cafe and car park are newly added in the park which are located at near of Arnold Avenue and underground of Eldon Street, respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both the 1920 plan and the present-day park, and your overview identifies that the layout has changed while retaining entrances from Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street. You also report several important conversions, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden and the former glasshouse site becoming a water feature. Some details, however, are inaccurate or unclear: the pond was in the north-east, not the north-west, and the café is beside the northern entrance rather than simply “near” Arnold Avenue. The overview could also better summarise the main pattern of change, such as the replacement of several original features and the addition of new facilities. More precise comparisons would make the account more complete and developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph about the original park and one about the current layout. This gives the reader a sensible route through the comparison, and phrases such as “In 1920” and “Now” help signal the time contrast. However, some links between details are unclear, and the description does not consistently guide the reader around the map. For example, “the opposite of north corner” is difficult to interpret, while the final sentence combines the café and underground car park without clearly locating each in relation to the park. Use more precise spatial references and connect each former feature directly to its replacement to make progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of map-related vocabulary, including “fountain,” “stage,” “amphitheatre,” “rose garden” and “water feature,” and you attempt more descriptive language such as “surrounded” and “newly added.” Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or imprecise, however. “Fountain was occupied” does not express its location naturally, and “the stage for musician area is totally change by” makes the relationship between the old and new features hard to understand. There are also spelling errors, including “certer,” “midle,” “childern's” and “altared.” Aim for accurate location phrases such as “was located in” and precise change verbs such as “was replaced by”; careful proofreading would improve control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a relative clause in the opening and comparisons between the two plans. Meaning is generally recoverable, but some grammatical errors remain across the response. For example, “a public park which called Grange Park” is missing a verb form, and “There are two entrance” has a number-agreement error. In “A square shape children’s area is occupied the opposite of north corner,” the sentence structure and verb pattern are faulty, making the location difficult to follow. Articles and prepositions also need attention, as in “situated the south of corner.” Practise accurate passive forms and location clauses while retaining your attempts at varied sentence structures.

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