Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given maps illustrates the differences in Grange Park from when it first opened in 1920 untill today.Many new structures are added.

Overall the park has been transformed from a formal garden to a recreational park. The major changes are, replacement of fountain and one rose garden has been relocated. Many new areas have been constructed, which are children's playing area and cafe.

First of all, new underground car park area has been added. Moreover the glasshouse has been replaced with water feature. While at the place of pond we can see that now there is playing area for children. Rose garden has been placed in the middle of park in the replacement of fountain, and seating has been arranged around this garden. Followed to this, stage for musicians has been upgraded into Amphitheatre for concert.

Despite the changes in the park, it is now looking more advanced. Now it has a lot of facilities like cafe, children playing area and parking. In comparison to the first day, it looks great.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main transformation from a garden to a more recreational park and report several accurate changes: the central fountain becomes a rose garden with seating, the pond becomes a children’s play area, and the glasshouse is replaced by a water feature. You also mention the new café, amphitheatre and underground car-park entrance, so the response addresses the key features and comparisons. The overview is clear, although “one rose garden has been relocated” is imprecise: the central garden replaces the fountain, while the north-west garden remains and the south-west garden is replaced by the amphitheatre. To make the account more fully developed, distinguish these changes and include the café’s location or the unchanged entrances and north-west garden.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph describing changes and a concluding comment. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information. However, progression within the body is somewhat list-like, and linking phrases are occasionally mechanical or unclear. For example, “Followed to this” does not clearly connect the amphitheatre to the preceding changes, while “Despite the changes” introduces a conclusion that largely repeats the overview rather than adding a comparison. Grouping features by area—for instance, the northern and eastern changes, followed by the centre and west—would make the comparisons easier to follow. Use referencing and transitions more precisely so that each sentence’s relationship to the previous one is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for describing a park, including “replacement,” “relocated,” “facilities,” “water feature” and “amphitheatre.” These choices help communicate the main changes, and the meaning is generally clear. Some word choices and collocations are imprecise or informal, however: “playing area for children” and “children playing area” are less natural than “children’s play area,” and “upgraded into” does not accurately describe a change in map features. “It looks great” is subjective and unsuitable for a neutral map summary. Spelling errors such as “untill” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, neutral terms such as “was converted into,” “was replaced by” and “is now located in.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex structures, including “While at the place of pond…” and “Despite the changes in the park…”. The intended meaning is usually understandable, but some errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles and punctuation remain. For example, “The given maps illustrates” has a plural subject with a singular verb, and “at the place of pond” is missing an article. The opening also runs sentences together: “today.Many new structures…”. Several sentences begin with fragments or awkward subordinate clauses, particularly “While at the place of pond…” and “Followed to this…”. Practise building complete comparison sentences with accurate articles and verb forms, such as “The pond was replaced by a children’s play area.”

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