Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The given figure shows the design of the Grange Park located between Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Overall, the location of old entrances and rose garden remained the same while the seating arrangements were modified and some new additions were done in today's park plan.

First, in 1920, the Grange Park had only two entrances on both sides of the park. However, a new underground entrance has been made for parking cars now. Talking about the seats arrangement in 1920, they were placed near all the walls of the park but now seats are located in the center of the park, covering the rose garden.

There are some new additions in the park now like children's play area, a cafe and more rose gardens. Also, the fountain is replaced by a new rose garden. The pond was removed and the new plan has a water feature, present in the southeast part of the park. Furthermore, the stage for the musicians is replaced by an amphitheatre for concerts and the glasshouse from 1920 is removed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You give a clear account of the park’s main changes and include an overview: the entrances and a rose garden remain, while seating and facilities have changed. Most comparisons are accurate, including the replacement of the fountain by a central rose garden, the pond by a play area, and the stage by an amphitheatre. However, the overview says the rose garden remained the same, which overgeneralises: only the north-west garden remains, while other gardens were removed or replaced. The claim that there are “more rose gardens” today is also inaccurate; the plan shows fewer. You could make the summary more complete by noting the café’s location and that the central seats surround the garden rather than cover it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall progression: an introduction and overview are followed by comparisons of entrances and seating, then changes to facilities. Linking phrases such as “Overall,” “However,” and “Furthermore” help guide the reader, and the information is generally easy to follow. At times, though, the organisation is more list-like than comparative. For example, the final paragraph moves through several replacements without grouping them by area or clearly contrasting the old and new layouts. “First” and “Talking about” also feel somewhat mechanical. To strengthen cohesion, organise the details into clearer spatial or feature-based comparisons and use references such as “in the north-east” to connect related changes.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of vocabulary for describing a map, including “replaced,” “southeast part,” “underground entrance,” and “amphitheatre for concerts.” These choices communicate the main changes, and the meaning remains clear. Some expressions are imprecise or unnatural, however: “seats arrangement” and “covering the rose garden” do not describe the layout accurately, while “new additions … like” is informal for this report. “More rose gardens” is also a misleading choice because the current plan has fewer gardens. Aim for more precise location and layout language, such as saying that seats surround the central garden, and use formal terms such as “facilities” or “features” when introducing changes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the contrast in “However, a new underground entrance has been made…” and the clause beginning “while.” Most sentences are understandable, and errors do not prevent the reader from following the comparison. Some grammatical choices are less controlled: “the location of old entrances and rose garden remained” has a number mismatch, and “the seating arrangements were modified and some new additions were done” uses an awkward passive construction. The phrase “the same park today” is also followed by inconsistent tense choices, including “has been made” and “is replaced.” Use past tense for the 1920 plan and present tense for the current layout, and check articles and singular/plural agreement.

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