Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The both pictures illustrate the difference when Grange park firstly opened in 1920 and then now in current days.So basically, the pictures tell the changes that made by the individuals in grange park.

First of all, if we talk about the 1920 their were two main entrances one is arnold avenue and other one is eldon street and than if we look at the today's picture the both entrances are remain same.If we further look at the 1920's map their were some seats with the boundary wall of the park but now these bunches shifted in the center around the rose garden in 1920 where fontain is situated but currently that is removed and made rose garden but at very first rose garden was located on the left hand and right hand of the arnold avenue entrance also on the left hand of the eldon street entrance.

Furthermore, their is newly made amphitheatre for concerts but if we look back in 1920 their was stage for musicians.In 1920 park has a pond for water plants on the left corner of the arnold avenue entrance but now its shifted to the right hand of the eldon sreet entrance.Also currently, made new play area for children's.New and main change is underground car parking.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several relevant changes, including the replacement of the central fountain with a rose garden, the new concert amphitheatre, and the children’s play area. You also note that the two street entrances remain. However, the response does not give a clear overview of the park’s main transformation, and some details are inaccurate or unclear: the pond was in the north-east corner, not the left corner of the Arnold Avenue entrance, and it was replaced by the play area rather than shifted to the south-east. The south-east corner now has a water feature, while the underground car park entrance is also there. Important changes such as the café and the former glasshouse are omitted, so the main features are only partly covered.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from the entrances and seating to features in the western and eastern parts of the park. Paragraphing also separates the discussion into two sections. However, the progression is not consistently clear because several changes are combined in long, loosely connected sentences. Phrases such as “First of all,” “if we further look,” and “Furthermore” provide some linking, but the repeated conditional framing makes the account feel mechanical. References such as “that is removed” and “its shifted” are not always clear about which feature is meant. Organising the comparison by location or by features that changed would make the relationships easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “entrances,” “rose garden,” “amphitheatre,” and “pond for water plants,” which helps communicate the map changes. However, the range is limited and several choices or collocations are inaccurate or informal. “Bunches” does not describe seats, “newly made” is awkward for a park feature, and “underground car parking” would be more precise as an entrance to an underground car park. Spelling errors such as “fontain” and “sreet,” along with inconsistent capitalisation of place names, reduce accuracy. Aim to use precise location language such as “north-east corner” and “along the southern edge” rather than relying on “left” and “right.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, but the longer structures are often difficult to control. Errors in verb forms and agreement appear in phrases such as “the both entrances are remain same” and “their were two main entrances.” Articles and sentence construction are also problematic, as in “the difference when Grange park firstly opened” and “In 1920 park has a pond.” Several sentences run together without appropriate punctuation, making the comparisons harder to understand. Use a consistent past tense for the 1920 plan and present tense for today, and build shorter, complete sentences before adding subordinate clauses. These recurring errors limit clarity despite the reader being able to understand the general topic.

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