Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The maps illustrate the changes over time for Grange Park from 1920 when it was opened and current condition of the place.

Overall, a massive change can be seen for everything except the rose garden on the North-West side and two entrances from Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street.

Initially from both entrace, a fountain can be seen at the center of the park, which is now replaced by a square shaped rose garden with seats on every side. On the Western side, there used to be a stage for musicians back in 1920 but it is now renovated to an amphitheatre for concerts. The pond for water plants and rose garden on the North-East side of the park is replaced by children's playground and cafe respectively. Though in 1920, there was a glasshouse on the South-East corner , it is now replaced by a water feature. There is also a car parking introduced just outside the park near the water feature. There were seats in different corner in the past but all are replaced to the center of the park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You give a clear overview of the main transformation, noting that the north-west rose garden and the two street entrances remain, while the central fountain becomes a rose garden with seating. You also report several important changes accurately, including the western amphitheatre, the north-east play area, and the south-east water feature. This covers the task well and keeps the description grounded in the plans. Some details are less fully developed: for example, the café is described as replacing a north-east rose garden, but its position is more precisely along the northern edge east of the entrance. The statement that all former seats were moved to the centre is also an over-generalisation; the current plan shows seats around the central garden, but does not establish that every old seat was relocated there.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall shape: an introduction, a separate overview, and a paragraph describing the changes. The sequence from the centre to the western and then eastern areas helps the reader follow the map comparison. Linking expressions such as “Initially,” “but,” and “Though” also show an attempt to connect past and present information. However, the final paragraph places many changes in one long sequence, and some references are not fully clear—for instance, “the pond for water plants and rose garden on the North-East side” makes the locations of the two features difficult to distinguish. Grouping the northern, central, and southern changes more deliberately, and using clearer references, would make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of map vocabulary, including “replaced,” “amphitheatre,” “water feature,” and “corner,” and the reader can generally understand the changes being described. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “square shaped rose garden.” Some choices are imprecise or unnatural, however: “current condition of the place” is less suitable than “the park today,” while “renovated to an amphitheatre” does not accurately express a change in use or layout. “Car parking” is also less precise than “an underground car park,” and “different corner” is an awkward description of the former seating locations. More accurate collocations and consistent map terminology would improve precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “when it was opened” and a contrast introduced by “Though.” Most sentences communicate the intended comparisons, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “from both entrace” has a number and article problem, and “a massive change can be seen for everything except” uses an awkward grammatical construction. In “the pond … and rose garden … is replaced,” the compound subject requires a plural verb, while “There were seats in different corner” also has a plural agreement issue. Review articles, plurals, and subject–verb agreement, and check punctuation around introductory clauses to make the sentences more controlled.

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