Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagrams compare the current layout of public park and when it was built in 1920. Including some new features like water feature, cafe and children's

play area.

Overall, there are many additional changes in today park compare to the old park. A big change in center of the park, fountain replace with rose garden . another changing in pound for water plants into children play area.

In 1920, there were two entrance points in the front and back sides of the park, and a fountain was placed in the middle of the park. all around the park, there were many seats, while two rose gardens near to the left corner seats in the front and back sides of the park , additional rose garden at the upper side of park near to the pound for water plants in right side of park. A stage for the musicians located between the both rose gardens in the left side and a glass house located in the lower side of park in the right side.

In now a days, there were many crucial changes with many features of the park. The fountain replaced by rose garden surrounded by seats, while entrance are at same locations. Stage for musician change into amphitheatre for concerts , furthermore a cafe and children's play ground are build at time place of rose garden and pound for water plants in the upper right side of the park. Glass house is change into water feature with a entrance of underground car park in the right side of park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation in the park’s centre and compare several former and current features, including the fountain becoming a rose garden, the pond becoming a play area, and the glasshouse becoming a water feature. The overview also recognises that the park has changed substantially, while correctly noting that the entrances remain in the same locations. This covers the task well, and the half-band reflects that several key comparisons are reported. However, some details are unclear or incomplete: the café’s location is described as the “upper right side,” although it is just east of the northern entrance, and the north-west rose garden’s survival is not mentioned. A more precise overview of what remained and what changed, followed by clearer location comparisons, would make the account more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the 1920 and present-day layouts. This gives the reader a broad chronological route through the information. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several locations and features are packed into long sentences, particularly the description beginning “all around the park.” Linking phrases such as “while” and “furthermore” are used, but some connections are mechanical or do not clearly show the relationship between features. References such as “front and back” and “upper right side” also make orientation less precise. Grouping features by area or by what changed, and using consistent north/south/east/west references, would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “entrance,” “amphitheatre,” and “underground car park,” so the reader can identify most of the features being compared. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “crucial changes.” However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive: “pound for water plants” appears where “pond” is intended, “in now a days” is not a natural expression, and “build at time place” does not clearly express that facilities replaced earlier features. “Many additional changes” and “many crucial changes” are also vague. More precise verbs such as “replaced,” “remained,” and “was converted into,” alongside accurate feature names, would make the comparisons clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the response communicates the broad comparison despite grammatical problems. However, control is inconsistent, especially in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries. For example, “fountain replace with rose garden” needs a passive form (“the fountain was replaced by a rose garden”), while “entrance are at same locations” has agreement and article errors. The sentence beginning “Including some new features” is a fragment, and “A big change in center of the park” is also incomplete. Capitalisation after full stops is inconsistent. Practise forming complete sentences and use past tense for the 1920 plan and present tense for today; accurate passive constructions will be particularly useful for describing changes.

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