Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The maps illustarte the changes of a public park that have taken place between 1920 and the present day

Overall, it is clear that area has undergo significant changes over the period, fountain has been demolished and rose garden constructed with seats in the all sides. children's play area is introduced in the place of pond.

furthermore, stage for musicians were renovated to amphitheatre for concerts. rose garden in north left remained as same in the time period.Cafe` was newly introduced by replacing rose garden which is at the north west. In addition water feature was added in the south east.while entrence remained same in this time perio

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several important changes, including the central fountain being replaced by a rose garden with seats, the pond becoming a children’s play area, and the musicians’ stage becoming an amphitheatre. You also note the north-west rose garden remains. However, the account is only partial: the café is described as replacing a rose garden, but its location is incorrectly called north-west; it is on the northern edge east of the entrance. The south-east water feature is mentioned, but the glasshouse it replaced is not. The entrances and underground car-park entrance are not clearly covered. The response is also 42 words below the required minimum, leaving these comparisons under-developed. Include a fuller overview and explain the main changes by area.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall sequence: it opens by introducing the maps, gives a general summary, and then lists several changes. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “furthermore,” and “In addition” help signal relationships between points. However, the ideas are compressed into one continuous paragraph, and the progression between locations is not always clear. For example, the café sentence is followed by the water feature without a clear organising pattern, while the final statement about entrances is unfinished. Grouping details into paragraphs—an overview followed by changes in the north, centre, and south—would make the comparison easier to follow. Use linking words to show relationships accurately rather than simply adding another item.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “pond,” “amphitheatre,” and “water feature,” so the reader can recognise many of the features being compared. However, the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the description less clear. For instance, “renovated to amphitheatre” does not express that the stage was replaced by an amphitheatre, and “in the place of pond” is an awkward way to describe the change. There are also spelling and capitalisation slips, such as “illustarte,” “entrence,” and inconsistent use of “rose garden.” Practise precise verbs for map changes, such as “replaced,” “converted,” and “retained,” and check spelling before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of sentence forms, including a general overview and clauses describing what replaced earlier features. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “area has undergo significant changes,” “stage for musicians were renovated,” and “rose garden constructed with seats in the all sides.” The final phrase, “while entrence remained same in this time perio,” is incomplete and lacks the grammatical detail needed to explain which entrances remained. Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, check past-tense forms when describing the 1920 plan, and use articles consistently. Short, accurate comparisons are a useful starting point.

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