Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Learning of other subjects is more beneficial for the University student than learn only the relevant subject other subject may provide a knowledge of other things that is a good point for the student through it it may achieve different goals not only a single thing so it is best for the Students

But some students can learn the books like novels that are romantic so it may have negative impacts on youngsters on my point of view the Students may learn the books about Islam and knowledgeable books that may provide a knowledge which may helpful in the future life.

On my 2 years experience most of the Students waste their time on using mobiles and that may effect badly on its health so the Students learn other subjects that may

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You express a relevant preference for learning beyond a student’s main subject, and you attempt to give reasons, such as gaining knowledge for different goals and avoiding time spent on mobile phones. However, the response only minimally addresses the full task: the view that students should focus entirely on their qualification is not explained, and your own opinion is not stated clearly in a complete conclusion. The examples about romantic novels and books about Islam do not clearly show how studying additional subjects benefits university students. The response is also substantially below the required 250 words, so there is not enough explanation or support for the ideas. Develop both views, state your position directly, and add a specific example for each main point.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to connect ideas, for example with “But” to introduce a contrasting point and “On my 2 years experience” to introduce personal observation. However, the response does not have a clear overall progression: the opening moves from additional subjects to different goals, then to novels and religious books, without explaining how these points relate. The final sentence is unfinished (“so the Students learn other subjects that may”), which leaves the argument incomplete. Several ideas are joined in long strings with little punctuation, making relationships difficult to follow. Use separate paragraphs for the two views and your opinion, and connect each example explicitly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “subjects,” “qualification,” “knowledgeable,” and “negative impacts,” so the reader can identify the general subject of the response. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “other things,” “different goals,” and repeated uses of “Students.” Some combinations are unnatural, including “learn the books” and “provide a knowledge,” which make parts of the message harder to understand. Aim for more precise academic expressions and vary repeated words. For example, you could refer to “elective courses,” “broader knowledge,” or “career opportunities” when explaining the value of studying beyond a major.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express reasons and contrast, including a longer sentence beginning “other subject may provide,” but most structures are simple or joined together without clear sentence boundaries. Errors in verb forms and sentence construction occur in phrases such as “more beneficial … than learn” and “the Students learn the books.” There are also problems with articles, agreement, and pronouns, as in “a knowledge” and “on its health.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, and the final clause is incomplete. These issues sometimes make the intended relationships unclear. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use a range of accurate simple and complex forms, checking agreement and punctuation.

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