Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

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Many university students want learn exceptional subjects in addition to their academic subjects, while some people argue that it is more important to give full afford and concentrate to improved their professional skill and qualification. Although academic ability helps get jobs, i believe that other subjects is essential for learning cognitive knowledge and discovering innovative ideas.

On the one hand, learning other subjects provide significant benefits for students. Firsly, students can gain cognitive knowledge to achive their goal by choosing their own career path. For instance, sometime students got more interest in photography rather than main subjects. It can be a advantage for students to choose their dreams who want to make a career in these particular profession. Secondly, if they have the opportunities to learn their own favourite subjects, they can come up with new innovative ideas. For example, today students introduce new business ideas using their own skills such as online selling clothes pages un facebook. Furthermore, i can be a successful business if they work hand and gives their full affords.

On the other hand, Some people argue that it is more important to improved practical skills and academic qualification beacause they can get jobs easily as compare to others. For instance, softawer companies priorities working expreience and good academic results to give jobs. In addition, students can get the job easily as compare who does not have the good qualification. As a result, learning main subjects and improved working skill make their career path easy.

In conclusion, giving all their time and attention to studying for a qualification is good their career. However, i believe that is more important give them opportunities to learn other subject to reach their own dreams.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state a clear opinion: you recognise the value of focusing on qualifications, but argue that studying other subjects can support personal ambitions and new ideas. The examples about photography and online clothing sales make your first view relevant, while the software-company example supports the qualification-focused view. However, some points are less fully developed than others. For instance, the claim that other subjects build “cognitive knowledge” is not explained clearly, and the business example does not show in detail how studying an additional subject leads to success. Develop each reason with a clearer explanation or a specific outcome. The response meets the task’s length requirement; 10 words copied from the prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Phrases such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes uneven, and some links between ideas are unclear. In the first body paragraph, the move from choosing a career path to innovative ideas and then business success feels abrupt; “Furthermore” does not fully explain the relationship. The conclusion also repeats the position without drawing the two views together. Use clearer topic sentences and explain how each example supports its point, while varying linking expressions and making references such as “they” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for the topic, including “career path,” “academic qualification,” “practical skills,” and “innovative ideas.” These choices show an effort to discuss education and employment beyond very basic terms. However, word choice, collocation, and spelling errors are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning less clear. Examples include “full afford,” “improved their professional skill,” “a advantage,” and “softawer companies priorities.” Some phrases are also imprecise, such as “cognitive knowledge” and “own favourite subjects.” Aim to learn vocabulary in natural combinations and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise expressions would make your arguments easier to understand and help you express distinctions between academic study, transferable skills, and personal interests.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast in the introduction (“while some people argue…”) and conditional phrasing (“if they have the opportunities…”). The main ideas are generally understandable, but errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, and articles occur across the response. For example, “Many university students want learn” needs an infinitive marker, and “learning other subjects provide” has a subject–verb agreement problem. In “i can be a successful business if they work,” the pronoun reference and clause structure are unclear. There are also inconsistent capitalisation and punctuation choices. Practise accurate sentence patterns and check each sentence for a clear subject, correctly formed verb, and consistent pronouns; this will make your complex attempts more controlled.

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