Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In today's the modern world. Some university student want to learn other subject in addition to their main subjects. This issue has become increasingly important in recent years and has attracted considerable attention from people around the world. This has raised two important questions: why students want to learn another subjects in addition their main subjects and some students think give your all attention on that subjects you main books to study for qualification. This essay will explore both questions in details an provide relevant explanations and examples to support my answers.

Regarding the first question why Some university student want to learn other subject in addition to their main subjects. Because they were tired learning same subjects daily. For instance its nature of human learn something new. This clearly demonstrate why some students skip their on subjects and want to learn some new books. moreover universities should make that type of syllabus students enjoy learning.

Turning to the second question , I This because it is about future of students. A good example of this can be seen in international universties students work hard to achieve there max marks.

In conclusion the issue of Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. raises two significant concerns. In response, I Have explain that students are learn daily only one book after some time they feel boredom. and I believe that it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Both aspects are important because they can influence individuals and society in different ways. Having considered that arguments above, I believe that these questions should be addressed carefully to achieve better outcomes in future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You introduce both views and state a preference in the conclusion: “I believe that it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification.” However, the discussion only partially answers the task. The first view is supported mainly by the general claim that students get tired of studying the same subjects, while the second is reduced to saying that students work hard for high marks. Neither point is explained with a clear, relevant example, and your opinion is not developed in the body. The opening also frames the task as two questions rather than a discussion of competing views. Develop each side with reasons and specific examples, then explain why you favour one view. (The response meets the required length; 31 words copied from the prompt were excluded.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is an identifiable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. Transitions such as “Regarding the first question” and “Turning to the second question” help signal the topic of each body paragraph. However, progression within paragraphs is weak, and some links are unclear or mechanical. For example, “This clearly demonstrate why some students skip their on subjects” does not clearly follow from the point about wanting to learn something new. The second body paragraph is very brief and does not connect its example to the argument. The conclusion repeats earlier claims rather than bringing the discussion together. Use a clear topic sentence, explanation, and example in each body paragraph, and make references between sentences explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “subjects,” “qualification,” “syllabus,” and “achieve,” and phrases such as “in recent years” show an attempt to use a broader range. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, form, and spelling errors make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “another subjects,” “in details,” “max marks,” and “there max marks.” Some expressions are also unnatural, such as “skip their on subjects” and “learn some new books.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling and word forms. More precise language for the arguments—such as “broaden their knowledge” or “focus on their degree requirements”—would help you express the two views clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer structures, including “This issue has become increasingly important in recent years” and “Both aspects are important because they can influence individuals and society.” However, the range is limited, and frequent errors in sentence formation and basic grammar sometimes obscure meaning. The opening fragment, “In today's the modern world,” is not a complete, well-formed sentence; “This clearly demonstrate” has subject–verb disagreement; and “I Have explain” uses an incorrect verb form. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries, as in “Some university student want” and the run-on opening paragraph. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking agreement, verb forms, and punctuation.

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